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Drunkard Jackass
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 1221 | September 25th, 2005 at 06:05pm hi  i wrote a song yesterday and i was wondering what you people think? i do have music to it but i'm not gonna write it down, so here it is i guess :p
P.S and if you have an idea of what it should be called then thats kinda helpful, the songs about my mother.. i'm kinfa having a shitty time with er
Around in circles then we fall x 6
1. Oh,When i come around, you shoot me down.
is there anyway to disarm you? no, you disonate
you take me with, within the depths of nowhere
your laughters cruel, i'm running out of fuel
but your still laughing..
around in circles then we fall x 6
2. I'm so sick of you, it's fucking deja voù
Are you sick of me too`you know you can't handle the truth
So you make up lies, ones i can't despise
Oh god i really hate you now
ooh...
Around in circles tehn we fall x 3
Oh but no it's goin swell x 3
[ Repeat 2.]
around in circles tehn we fall [same time]
well there it is.. be honest.. if it sucks cheese.. say it |
Dom Jackass
 Age: 35 Gender: Male Posts: 1691 | September 27th, 2005 at 01:30pm what about the music? its hard to tell how good it is without the music. |
Gustavatron. Addict
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 12813 | September 27th, 2005 at 01:35pm The lyrics are... im sorry. but they are crap. |
Drunkard Jackass
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 1221 | September 27th, 2005 at 03:43pm well fair enough  |
Dimebag Dan \m/ Geek
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 246 | September 27th, 2005 at 04:30pm I dont think its that bad :0 |
State Radio Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: 33 Gender: Male Posts: 6583 | September 28th, 2005 at 08:05pm how old are you? |
cheese_for_a_day Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 6602 | September 28th, 2005 at 09:16pm they're not that bad...plus, like someone said before, its hard to tell without the music.. |
fancy pants Post Whore
 Age: 37 Gender: Female Posts: 22225 | September 28th, 2005 at 09:35pm That's not bad. The last couple lines in the second verse is a little confusing to me. But it's not bad. Do you have any recording software that you can record the song with so we can hear the tune? Or can you tab it? |
Drunkard Jackass
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 1221 | September 29th, 2005 at 09:59am i'm 13
i can't write tab so it's a little hard for me  |
Gustavatron. Addict
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 12813 | September 29th, 2005 at 10:51am Dan_1039 \m/:I dont think its that bad :0 Well. i weite worse Lyrics... But i keep em all in my head.
You are better than me. Sorry for my... Mean saying. |
State Radio Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: 33 Gender: Male Posts: 6583 | September 30th, 2005 at 05:29pm Im 13 as well it's not bad for a 13 year old but if you were like 34 well then my opinion would be different |
Queen of Doookie Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 3 | October 1st, 2005 at 06:18am God you suck.....
naah i'm just kidding  t'was good, i can kinda relate to that song, it's good for a 13 year old  |
Drunkard Jackass
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 1221 | October 9th, 2005 at 05:32pm thank you  |
State Radio Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: 33 Gender: Male Posts: 6583 | October 9th, 2005 at 10:15pm Make a tab for this song then i can sit alone in my bedroom playing it |
Rols Rois Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 33 | October 21st, 2005 at 08:08am the lyrics aren't that good...
no offence but it's more like a storytale instead of a song...  |
Avantidrummer Geek
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 458 | October 21st, 2005 at 11:35am I don't think it's 'crap' at all, (for a 13 year old also) I think it could sound pretty good with the right music.
Don't worry too much about not being able to write the tabs down at the moment, it's easy ti pick up - anyway, do you actually think Billie Joe can write tabs? He admits himself he can't even read music. |
ellie ex-friend Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: 31 Gender: Female Posts: 7772 | October 21st, 2005 at 01:18pm Yeah it kinda sucks. Its OK. But people, nothing about the age, I was ten and I wrote my first gothic/rock song and is now a local hit. |
Avantidrummer Geek
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 458 | October 21st, 2005 at 03:18pm LiberationOfTheLostSoul:Yeah it kinda sucks. Its OK. But people, nothing about the age, I was ten and I wrote my first gothic/rock song and is now a local hit.
Having a 'local hit' doesn't give you the right to say that someone elses work 'sucks'. Everyone has opinion but there are ways to be tactful about giving it. |
k-contentbarrier- Addict
 Age: 33 Gender: Male Posts: 14139 | October 22nd, 2005 at 12:50pm i'm also a 13-year old songwriter too...good work. |
Spirit Of '77 Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 5024 | October 22nd, 2005 at 12:51pm Sundance Kid.:The lyrics are... im sorry. but they are crap. |