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votefordisco
Rotting On Here
votefordisco
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 45710

Mibba
March 7th, 2006 at 02:59pm
This is an extract from my 'in progress' story. I haven't posted any parts to it yet
because I want to wait until I know that I'm going to carry on with it. Please tell me what you think of this,
be it good or rotten, and tell me if I should keep going or give up now.


“Welcome to Oakland, CA and please enjoy your stay here.”
Bean made a face.
“How do they know that we’re only here for a ‘stay’? We could be moving here for all they know. Or we could already live here and be returning from a holiday in England. Or Thailand. Or, like, anywhere else in the world.”
Blaire gave a small chuckle. “Get used to it. People will make assumptions about everyone else’s situation whether you like it or not. It always has and will be that way.”
“You’re too laid back. Well, not exactly laid back, I can’t find a word for it though. It’s like; you just accept everything the way it is. If something bothers you then you tend to just accept it and move on.” Bean said. “I can’t do that. If something annoys me I at least need to rant about it for a bit even if there isn’t anything I can do to change it.” She gave Blaire a long hard look and then sighed to herself. “You’re too Blairey.”
Blaire chuckled again. “Well at least I’m just ‘Blairey’ and not anything too weird. ‘Blairey’ isn’t too bad.”
“Come on. Let’s get going, we don’t want it to start getting dark before we’ve found a place to stay.” Bean bent down, picked up her rucksack and guitar case and began heading towards the main exit of the building.
“Dude, it’s like 2 O’clock. I doubt it’s going to start getting dark anytime soon.” Blaire mumbled as she picked up her rucksack and instruments and reluctantly began to follow her friend out into the hot Californian sunlight.

Thanks you for reading! Snoo xxx <3 xxx
votefordisco
Rotting On Here
votefordisco
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 45710

Mibba
March 7th, 2006 at 05:36pm
Is it really so bad that you won't even comment it?!

Wow.
Lucy3011
King For A Couple Of Days
Lucy3011
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 3472
March 7th, 2006 at 05:47pm
Snoo:
Is it really so bad that you won't even comment it?!

Wow.

It's only been two and a half hours - Patience! Wink

I like the way you write. It flows really nicely and your sentences make sense and everything! Very Happy

Sounds good. Keep writing.
Madeluxx
King For A Couple Of Days
Madeluxx
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 2276

Mibba
March 7th, 2006 at 05:51pm
Intresting. Keep writing!
Viva La Curry
Geek
Viva La Curry
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 386
March 7th, 2006 at 06:30pm
Madeluxx:
Intresting. Keep writing!
your avatars cooooolll... i love duran duran, mostly thier old stuff tho..... Very Happy

u shud carry on with the story Snoo it sounds really interesting!!!
Madeluxx
King For A Couple Of Days
Madeluxx
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 2276

Mibba
March 7th, 2006 at 06:35pm
XCurry-OwnsX:
Madeluxx:
Intresting. Keep writing!
your avatars cooooolll... i love duran duran, mostly thier old stuff tho..... Very Happy

u shud carry on with the story Snoo it sounds really interesting!!!


haha thank you - I made it myself *smugness*- (sorry offtopic)
votefordisco
Rotting On Here
votefordisco
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 45710

Mibba
March 8th, 2006 at 10:25am
Yay thankies guys!

Yeah I am quite impatient...I usually get all worked up after about ten minutes so two and a half hours was a long time to wait for me...
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