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Bamf! Jackass Age: - Gender: Female Posts: 1763	May 3rd, 2006 at 12:37pm It's come to this... The only place to make me feel secure. The place that can hold my insanity.... To comfort me... Time to hide.... Once again back into my dark space where spiders live in every crack and crevice... Freezing down in here. I never even noticed. My emotions, crushed dreams, and broken hearted stories all are released as I scream them allowed. Echoing softly, cooing to me, All of the pain I've finally released. Once again back into my dark space where spiders live in every crack and crevice... Freezing down in here. I never even noticed. Here I go again... To the only place to make me feel sane. The only place where I could admit to myself The things that have gone so wrong... Once again back into my dark space where spiders live in every crack and crevice... Freezing down in here. I never even noticed. Now all you can here... Is the silent weeping Of my wishes and used to be's....
snowcherry King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 3912	May 3rd, 2006 at 01:07pm Freezing down in here. I never even noticed. I loved how you kept repeating that bit. That was cool. The poem was okay, but you can do better.
Bamf! Jackass Age: - Gender: Female Posts: 1763	May 3rd, 2006 at 02:20pm snowcherry: Freezing down in here. I never even noticed. I loved how you kept repeating that bit. That was cool. The poem was okay, but you can do better. I know....not my best work, but I'll try harder next time.
What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 2451	May 3rd, 2006 at 03:24pm I like it. In my opinion ellipsis shouldn’t be used in poems, but that’s what I think. Otherwise it’s good. It flows nicely and the repetition works really well. I too think that you can do better though. You have potential.
Bamf! Jackass Age: - Gender: Female Posts: 1763	May 3rd, 2006 at 04:05pm What's in a name?: I like it. In my opinion ellipsis shouldn’t be used in poems, but that’s what I think. Otherwise it’s good. It flows nicely and the repetition works really well. I too think that you can do better though. You have potential. ^__________^ Thank you! And as I said to snowcherry, I will do better next time. I promise.
What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 2451	May 3rd, 2006 at 04:10pm You’re welcome. And I’m sure you will do great!
Green Day Girl 22 Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie Age: - Gender: - Posts: 86	May 3rd, 2006 at 04:19pm wonderful. much better than the poem i made.
Bamf! Jackass Age: - Gender: Female Posts: 1763	May 3rd, 2006 at 04:20pm The funny thing is I made this in about five minutes, and it's apparently still good.
razzledgirl Jackass Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 1491	May 3rd, 2006 at 05:48pm i lurb it
Diskoh Falling In Love With The Board Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 8701	May 3rd, 2006 at 05:50pm I loved it <3
Bamf! Jackass Age: - Gender: Female Posts: 1763	May 3rd, 2006 at 06:16pm Aww. Thanks. ^_^

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