radioactive
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Posts: 338
 | its more of a song then a poem really....
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Burn
Addicted to an illegal substance
Losing interest in everything important
Lost happiness so long ago
So time slowly fades to darkness
Darkness fades to emptiness
This addiction so confusing
This confusions so addicting
Say one thing you mean another
Tear my heart to pieces
And watch me fall so......
NO ONE CAN SAVE ME NOW!!
Watch me fall, and fade again
Rain clouds drown you with my tears
This pain it tears me limb from limb
It's like it's my execution
Quit messing with my mind
Your driving me to insanity
So lie and say you love me
And then you can walk away
Just leave for good this time
I won't be missunderstood this time
So tell me goodbye, and leave for good this time. |
radioactive
Geek
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 338
| ok i get it it sux at least hav the guts to say it people |
radioactive
Geek
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 338
| thank you for hating my poetry and songs have a nice day |
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Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
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Posts: 7 | gee...its good but why is everything people write these days so sad  heres a funny poem i shall now improvise!
if i was a frog
and you were a flying monkey
that lived in a bog
would that be funny?
of course it would!
from me to you!
of course it should!
cause its funny when monkeys throw poo.
HAHA but as for your poem, its good. very sad...i like the addiction/confusion lines. they're cool. its NOT crap okay i give ... 7/10 because its sad and you can do a lot more with those feelings...try reading edgar allen poe. to write poetry well, you HAVE to read poetry. HAVE TO. it will teach you how to make it more powerful 
but i think its good! |
x_generation_x
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
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Posts: 7 | HEY! WHY DOES MY THINGY SAY I'M A NEWBIE! YUCK! STUPID THINGY! |
radioactive
Geek
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 338
| yay someone likes it! lol anyways its sad cuz im kinda sad myself..dont ask. i know the addiction lines are my favorite out of the whole thing. i thought of them all by myself which is surprising *is proud* |
lyrical_mess
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 5278
 | This one is much better than the other one. By the way, if you want replies, don't do the who guilt trip thing with "i know you think it sucks..." . Grow up. But the poem's cool. Read mine. Look for it in the forum. Its called " a poem by a lyrical mess" or something. yeah. |
What's in a name?
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 2451
| radioactive:thank you for hating my poetry and songs have a nice day
Thank you for wishing me a nice day!
No, but seriously, grow up. Stop being so damn immature. You’re poem is not horrible and I don’t think anyone hates it. It’s not that good though, I'll admit that, but keep trying. |
