yet another poem

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radioactive
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Mibba
May 9th, 2006 at 06:42am
its more of a song then a poem really....
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Burn

Addicted to an illegal substance
Losing interest in everything important
Lost happiness so long ago
So time slowly fades to darkness
Darkness fades to emptiness

This addiction so confusing
This confusions so addicting
Say one thing you mean another
Tear my heart to pieces
And watch me fall so......
NO ONE CAN SAVE ME NOW!!
Watch me fall, and fade again
Rain clouds drown you with my tears

This pain it tears me limb from limb
It's like it's my execution
Quit messing with my mind
Your driving me to insanity
So lie and say you love me
And then you can walk away
Just leave for good this time
I won't be missunderstood this time
So tell me goodbye, and leave for good this time.
radioactive
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Mibba
May 9th, 2006 at 07:10am
ok i get it it sux at least hav the guts to say it people
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Mibba
May 9th, 2006 at 07:24am
thank you for hating my poetry and songs have a nice day
x_generation_x
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May 9th, 2006 at 07:24am
gee...its good but why is everything people write these days so sad Sad heres a funny poem i shall now improvise!

if i was a frog
and you were a flying monkey
that lived in a bog
would that be funny?

of course it would!
from me to you!
of course it should!
cause its funny when monkeys throw poo.

HAHA but as for your poem, its good. very sad...i like the addiction/confusion lines. they're cool. its NOT crap okay i give ... 7/10 because its sad and you can do a lot more with those feelings...try reading edgar allen poe. to write poetry well, you HAVE to read poetry. HAVE TO. it will teach you how to make it more powerful Very Happy

but i think its good!
x_generation_x
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May 9th, 2006 at 07:26am
HEY! WHY DOES MY THINGY SAY I'M A NEWBIE! YUCK! STUPID THINGY!
radioactive
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Mibba
May 9th, 2006 at 07:31am
yay someone likes it! lol anyways its sad cuz im kinda sad myself..dont ask. i know the addiction lines are my favorite out of the whole thing. i thought of them all by myself which is surprising *is proud*
lyrical_mess
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Mibba Blog
May 9th, 2006 at 07:33am
This one is much better than the other one. By the way, if you want replies, don't do the who guilt trip thing with "i know you think it sucks..." . Grow up. But the poem's cool. Read mine. Look for it in the forum. Its called " a poem by a lyrical mess" or something. yeah.
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Mibba
May 9th, 2006 at 09:03am
radioactive:
thank you for hating my poetry and songs have a nice day

Thank you for wishing me a nice day!

No, but seriously, grow up. Stop being so damn immature. You’re poem is not horrible and I don’t think anyone hates it. It’s not that good though, I'll admit that, but keep trying.
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