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Dead End Girl
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Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 10219 | Well...this song kind of tells a story.
It's about two people, a boy and a girl. Both un-named (as of yet).
And they fall in lurve and...yeah.
It's corny xD.
The Boy From A Broken Home
Boy in a spiked belt
Left his home at age 16
Runs away from home
Surrounded by friends
And girls to boot
But in his heart he's so alone
Kissed at age 5
And lover by age 12
His life is going too fast
The boy from a broken home
Boy in girls pants
Loves a heartless woman
Does everything
A boy can do
And she turns him into nothing
Kissed at age 5
And lover by age 12
His life is going too fast
The boy from a broken home
Boy in my heart
Took away my love
Ran away
To be a star
Haven't seen him to this day
Kissed at age 5
And lover by age 12
His life is going too fast
The boy from a broken home
The boy from a broken home
My boy from the broken home... |
davey jones.
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 7018
  | =O That's awesome. |
KayCool123
Geek
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 147 | OMG!!!!!!!!!!!THIS IS REALLY GOOD!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
clark
GSBitch
Age: 32
Gender: Male
Posts: 79047 | May 10th, 2006 at 12:26am ...Wow |
Tre lives in my closet
Geek
Age: -
Gender: Female
Posts: 225 | May 10th, 2006 at 12:34am I love it! |
OMG, Shoes.
Geek
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 332 | May 10th, 2006 at 01:00am My parents are getting divorced.... |
Megan.
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 6962 | May 10th, 2006 at 01:11am It's..
Good. |
blond_slayer
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 2 | May 10th, 2006 at 02:11am sounds lyk a guy i no...... |
Megan.
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 6962 | May 10th, 2006 at 02:14am blond_slayer:sounds lyk a guy i no......
blond slayer, huh? [/offtopic] |
newagecarny
Was Here Two Weeks Ago
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 42495
| May 10th, 2006 at 04:04am It's okay. |
What's in a name?
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 2451
| May 10th, 2006 at 05:43am I don’t really like it. It feels cliché and in my opinion it’s very repetitive. |
xXx depressed_emo xXx
Geek
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 186 | May 10th, 2006 at 05:46am thats awesome dude |
Inari
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 37
Gender: Female
Posts: 2538 | May 10th, 2006 at 08:48am Kissed at age 5
And lover by age 12
His life is going too fast
The boy from a broken home
Loved that bit.
It all rocked. |
Magazine Sickness.
Geek
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 443
| May 10th, 2006 at 08:55am I'll agree with What's In A Name. It feels a little too cliche. |
[placebo]
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 78 | May 11th, 2006 at 05:53am repeditive is the way to get the message across... i liked that bit too:
Kissed at age 5
And lover by age 12
His life is going too fast
The boy from a broken home XD |
What's in a name?
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 2451
| May 11th, 2006 at 06:59am InNoSence:repeditive is the way to get the message across... i liked that bit too:
Kissed at age 5
And lover by age 12
His life is going too fast
The boy from a broken home XD
Yes, but I wasn't talking about repeating the refrain.
I was talking about repeating the same words over and over.  |
Dead End Girl
Addict
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 10219 | May 12th, 2006 at 06:43pm What's in a name?:InNoSence:repeditive is the way to get the message across... i liked that bit too:
Kissed at age 5
And lover by age 12
His life is going too fast
The boy from a broken home XD
Yes, but I wasn't talking about repeating the refrain.
I was talking about repeating the same words over and over.
I dunno...I mean it to be that way ^^;
I've been looknig at lyrics from The Pixies and I loved that style so I tried it out o_o;
Guess it didn't work so good...
But I still like it.
Thanks for the comments you peoples :B. |
killing loneliness
Idiot
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 572 | May 14th, 2006 at 01:35pm reminded me somehow of the song jesus of suburbia...and that songs reminds me of my best friend...i'm not used to this kind of poetry n stuff...but it's good in its own way. |
It Had to Be You.
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 3593 | May 14th, 2006 at 11:21pm 
B-E-A-U-T-I-F-U-L!
-prays-  "God, please let me write poetry like Akli."
...Ily. <3 |
F.O.D you nimrod
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 29 | May 14th, 2006 at 11:25pm i really love the chorus. nice job |
