Spiders In Her Pockets
Idiot
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 819 | May 14th, 2006 at 10:13am This Is The Best I Can Do.
You have it all,
Your life is wild,
I’m lonely, scared,
And just a child,
I loathe this life,
The hurt, the stress,
Take me away,
Reverse this mess,
We meet once more,
I feel your touch,
Not love again?
Its way too much,
Please take my heart,
Feel the beat,
Revive my soul,
We’re in too deep,
Such simple words,
Secure my pain,
Are you here to,
Keep me sane?
We’re closer now,
Your eyes are deep,
Our hands are linked,
You stop me weep,
You smile at me,
The tears ended,
For one minute,
My heart is mended,
When you’re happy,
I want to kiss,
Your sweet, soft lips,
That make me this,
Does truth last?
It doesn’t matter,
I’m prepared,
My heart will shatter,
I love you I just,
Can’t explain,
Are you here to,
Keep me sane?
When I’m with you,
I feel secure,
Stay here with me,
I know for sure,
We’re on cloud nine,
We’re in control,
I feel so safe,
With your black soul,
But I’m not sane,
I’m still in doubt,
Heart is crushed,
Must get out,
Rewind this all,
I want this death,
I need to run,
And stop my breath,
I’ll screw things up,
The blood will stain,
Are you here to,
Keep me sane? |
Milk
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 3741
  | May 14th, 2006 at 09:43pm I love it... but next time, use stanzas... please. |
It Had to Be You.
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 3593 | May 14th, 2006 at 11:08pm Saint of Denial:I love it... but next time, use stanzas... please. |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 2921
| May 15th, 2006 at 03:18pm Nice flow. Good job.  |
What's in a name?
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 2451
| May 15th, 2006 at 03:35pm It’s great. Good flow and no forced rhyming.
Mind you people, stanzas could have made it choppy
since the lines are so short.  |
