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Line & Sinker Idiot
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 638 | May 15th, 2006 at 06:34am Okay, so i'm not exactly a poet by trade, but I dabble.
Maybe some feedback?
Surreptitiously Romantic
Opaque sky crashing into a welcoming fog
This is truly a melodramatic exit
Always you would stand & gaze
Eyes glassy with a frozen stare
It’s much more intense when the truth can be seen
There are no words suitable
No actions fit
To depict the violent infatuation in those circles of
Severe colour
Mere conversation is utterly inept in the portrayal
Of actual feeling
Faraway glances into distant longing is truth
Truth being a painful momentary look
Forever classically tragic |
Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161 | May 15th, 2006 at 06:36am I really loved it  I had this amazing feeling when I read it... I luff it. |
Line & Sinker Idiot
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 638 | May 15th, 2006 at 06:39am wow, thankyou. that actually means a whole lot coming from you :] |
Inari King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 37 Gender: Female Posts: 2538 | May 15th, 2006 at 06:59am That's beautiful.
I love it. |
Line & Sinker Idiot
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 638 | May 15th, 2006 at 07:29am :] |
snowcherry King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 3912 | May 15th, 2006 at 10:15am That was really pretty.
So cute.  |
Meski Addict
 Age: 32 Gender: Male Posts: 14856
 | May 15th, 2006 at 10:26am Very nice OLÉ OLÉ!!! |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921
| May 15th, 2006 at 03:33pm That was AWESOME. I loved it.  |
It Had to Be You. King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 3593 | May 15th, 2006 at 03:37pm [Flawless Error]:That was AWESOME. I loved it.  |
spill_no_sick Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: 31 Gender: - Posts: 8588 | May 15th, 2006 at 08:58pm I won't comment too much because, unlike most poets here, that didn't suck huge grey hairy elephant balls
that was actually good, and you actually know what poetry is so thank you for that
now this forum has 0.2% actual good poetry |
Line & Sinker Idiot
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 638 | May 16th, 2006 at 02:26am thankyou thankyou thankyou thankyou |
killing loneliness Idiot
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 572 | May 16th, 2006 at 02:43am it's pretty good |
Mrs. Lee Jackass
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 1428
| May 16th, 2006 at 02:54am Pretty good, your better then me  |
B.J Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: - Gender: Male Posts: 8105 | May 16th, 2006 at 04:10am thats lovely  |
Line & Sinker Idiot
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 638 | May 17th, 2006 at 06:00am thanks |
x:MaDi:x Geek
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 426 | May 17th, 2006 at 06:16am cute and pretty sums it up  |
What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451
| May 17th, 2006 at 09:31am ^Yes it does. |