MY POEm of LOve and Distress ----- tell me wat you think

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Idiot
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May 17th, 2006 at 09:34am
Sittin alone
waiting for you
waiting for you to come and save me
save me from this
save me from them
save me from everything I've ever feared
save from this life I've never asked for

come and hold me till the night is over
wipe my tears I call normal
hold me and tell me you love me
please
please save me!!!

dedicated to my bf Derek! i wuv you!




(Ive done better) Rolling Eyes
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Idiot
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May 17th, 2006 at 09:41am
ok ok ok ive come to terms its crap, I have better stuff but its at home!! Rolling Eyes Embarassed
Dead End Girl
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May 17th, 2006 at 06:45pm
Uh...okay o_o;
Lacked feeling.
You could use some better words as well.
Clandi-Shan
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May 17th, 2006 at 06:58pm
It's ok but u should be more descriptive.It lacks emotion.U have to make people feel what your feeling.Write what u feel.
Sara.
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May 17th, 2006 at 07:06pm
Annie Victim:
Uh...okay o_o;
Lacked feeling.
You could use some better words as well.
That And Maybe Some Other, Different Words... Laughing
punkrockbitch
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May 17th, 2006 at 07:12pm
i think its great! but it would make a better song than poem.
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