I.Heart.Panic.
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 2019 | May 19th, 2006 at 01:29pm I sit alone.
Again.
And write in my diary.
Again.
I do my homework.
Again.
Where are you?
I walk home alone.
Again.
I avoid their stones.
Again.
I ignore the tears.
Again.
Where are you?
Maybe we'll be friends again,
Another chance, another way,
And maybe we'll fall out again,
If there's no chance, if there's no way.
But it won't be tomorrow.
Because tomorrow's flown away.
Yeah, I know, it sucked. But I've only ever posted one poem here so I figured why not. |
It Had to Be You.
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 3593 | May 19th, 2006 at 01:32pm I walk home alone.
Again.
I avoid their stones.
Again.
I ignore the tears.
Again.
Where are you?
Maybe we'll be friends again,
Another chance, another way,
And maybe we'll fall out again,
If there's no chance, if there's no way.
It did not suck!  It was amazing! I loved those two stanzas. Keep writing!  |
What's in a name?
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 2451
 | May 19th, 2006 at 02:37pm It ends too rapidly though. Like something’s missing, you know?
I really like it though, it’s good. |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 2921
| May 19th, 2006 at 02:50pm Love this stanza:
Maybe we'll be friends again,
Another chance, another way,
And maybe we'll fall out again,
If there's no chance, if there's no way.
I agree with Rose on this one; it seemed to end a little bit short. If you added a few lines more it would be great. |
CrazyEyes
Geek
Age: -
Gender: Female
Posts: 112 | May 19th, 2006 at 03:43pm Waiting <3:
Maybe we'll be friends again,
Another chance, another way,
And maybe we'll fall out again,
If there's no chance, if there's no way.
Wow. That line sounds exactly like what's going on with me. Love it. |
Baguelle
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 2727 | May 19th, 2006 at 06:40pm I didn't feel like it wasn't complete at all. I thought it was awesome, and the words fit perfectly together, in my opinion.
Anyway, I really like it. |
