Band Geek
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Posts: 134 | May 19th, 2006 at 05:15pm Your deepest, dark wish,
Is in front of you,
So painfully obvious,
It defines what is true.
Your deepest, dark wish,
Revealed from the mist,
From the dreams in your head,
To the scars on your wrist.
Your deepest, dark wish,
How it wants to be free,
To be released from its spell,
Of hope, eternally.
Your deepest, dark wish,
How much does it fear?
Of you knowing it,
Of resting in your ear.
Your deepest, dark wish,
Is in front of you,
So painfully obvious,
It defines what is true. |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 2921
 | May 19th, 2006 at 05:21pm I like the first three stanzas; they had a nice flow. The rest was just okay. |
snowcherry
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 3912 | May 19th, 2006 at 05:22pm I like it,
it has a nice flow to it. |
It Had to Be You.
King For A Couple Of Days
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Gender: -
Posts: 3593 | May 19th, 2006 at 05:29pm [Flawless Error]:I like the first three stanzas; they had a nice flow. The rest was just okay.  |
