Good morning, dreadful night.

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King For A Couple Of Days
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Mibba
May 22nd, 2006 at 01:55pm
Weird structure? Intentional
Strangely built sentences? Intentional
Crazy grammar? Intentional
Now read. Cool



Good morning, dreadful night.

Dark.
Light.
Closed eyes open.
Death.
Life
Inhale and choke.

A Shadow
Moving
Closer and further away

As I run

The streetlamps
Splashes puddles of light
In this dark realm.

I cannot see, I cannot speak.
The air gets caught in my throat,
Still every breath claws both lungs
While needles of fear taunt my freighted heart.

The circle is spinning as I flee,
If not I am the one who sprints astray.
Dead ends increases rapidly by the time
They fade away into nothing once more.

A ray cuts through the entire world
And I tumble out of my obscure universe.
I hit the ground as I fall down onto my bed,
Snatched from my nightmare by the rising sun.

Dawn
Morning
One pain traded for another.
A nightmare of imagination
For a dreadful brand new day.
Peter Petrelli
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Peter Petrelli
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May 22nd, 2006 at 02:06pm
Awwwww, I liked that. I really liked that.

And I liked the erratic pattern, made it all the more exciting to read.
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Mibba
May 22nd, 2006 at 03:05pm
That was rully good, my fine soulmate! I love the structure so much it hurts. And all the word choices! <3
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Mibba
May 22nd, 2006 at 03:48pm
Thank you so much, Ellen. Hug

*smiles* Thanks, my wonderful soulmate. That means a lot to me.
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Mibba
May 22nd, 2006 at 05:05pm
Wow. Cool
razzledgirl
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Mibba
May 23rd, 2006 at 01:40am
wowerz!!! AMAZING!!!
i want more i want more!
Skullivan.[Im Not Okay]
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May 23rd, 2006 at 01:55am
wow! really like the structure! its awsome
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Mibba
May 23rd, 2006 at 05:43am
Thank you all so very much! Very Happy
I’m so glad you like it because I’m quite happy with it.
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May 23rd, 2006 at 06:50am
god damnit I hate you -__-
AMAZING as usual
Inari
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May 23rd, 2006 at 09:32am
A ray cuts through the entire world
And I tumble out of my obscure universe.
I hit the ground as I fall down onto my bed,
Snatched from my nightmare by the rising sun.

^^^My Favourite Part^^^

It was beautiful, muffin.
Meski
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May 23rd, 2006 at 09:52am
Very nice
rollerpig
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May 23rd, 2006 at 09:53am
I like it! Very Happy
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Mibba
May 23rd, 2006 at 10:21am
Inari:
It was beautiful, muffin.

Gah! thank you, strawberry cupcake. Kiss
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Mibba
May 24th, 2006 at 04:59pm
B.J:
god damnit I hate you -__-
AMAZING as usual

Don't hate me! ;__;
Thank you x1000 Very Happy

And a big thanks to everyone!
B.J
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May 24th, 2006 at 05:02pm
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B.J:
god damnit I hate you -__-
AMAZING as usual

Don't hate me! ;__;
Thank you x1000 Very Happy

And a big thanks to everyone!

Dont worry I dont actually
I just envy you with a passion
you and your awesome writing Wink
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Mibba
May 24th, 2006 at 05:05pm
I knew you didn’t actually hate me. Razz
Can’t understand why you envy me though, but thank you.
B.J
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May 24th, 2006 at 05:07pm
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I knew you didn’t actually hate me. Razz
Can’t understand why you envy me though, but thank you.

you know why I envy you
cause you [and the rest of the ohsoawesome ones] are so damn good Cool
wish I was xP
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Mibba
May 25th, 2006 at 01:23pm
xD Thanks, dear.
You're awesome too you know. Good poetry takes time, yeah?
B.J
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May 25th, 2006 at 01:29pm
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xD Thanks, dear.
You're awesome too you know. Good poetry takes time, yeah?

yah it does >_<
I write songs rather then peoms
so they dont "flow" as much
and also I edit mine constantly
so sometimes they end up COMPLETELY different to the originals
and thank you Very Happy
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