Paranoia

I found this =O It's kind old but I thought "hey, why not post it".
I think it's not been posted before because I thought it was bad.

Paranoia

Suddenly words turn to daggers
That glimmer in the light
Of paranoia.
They leach out
Stabbing
Attacking
Ripping holes in an already confused mind.

Insecurity leaks and spill upon
The myriad of figures dancing
In a forever mocking way.
Lurking hidden messages
Awaits behind every sentence
To strike upon lacking trust.

Fear of rejection mixes with anger of being afraid.
The emotions tumble in a turmoil that’s roaring
On the inside of a thick skull filled with jagged memories,
Which cut through rationality with razor-sharp blades
Of a morbid past that creates the insane future reactions.

Isolation on an island created out of frustration,
Desolated in a raging sea with waves of mistrust
While trying to hide from the haunting inescapable facts.
Everywhere a new threat, every day means distrust
And every stranger can turn out as a demonic enemy.

It's good. Love the ending, my dear soulmate.

Thank you, my brilliant soulmate.

Awesomeness

It's interesting... I don't how to describe what I mean. But good interesting...

you acted like a dictionary, you described paranoia really good!

Outstanding!

"Everywhere a new threat, every day means distrust
And every stranger can turn out as a demonic enemy."

Friends and family get untrusted with paranoia also.

I like doing reviews, and frankly, you completely deserve one.

"Suddenly words turn to daggers
That glimmers in the light
Of paranoia."
^A small grammar mistake

"Insecurity leaks and spill upon
The myriad of figures dancing
In a forever mocking way."
^Such a beautiful way to put it.

When you started making the lines longer, I really thought that it would mess up the entire flow, but yet again you proved me wrong.

Overall, this poem has a pretty strong meaning behind it.

80/100

I agree with Ella
it's strong and I really like it
Paranoia is very apparant in the modern day world

I really like it =0

First of all: A big thank you to everyone and some candy *hands out candy*

Ella:

I like doing reviews, and frankly, you completely deserve one.

"Suddenly words turn to daggers
That glimmers in the light
Of paranoia."
^A small grammar mistake

"Insecurity leaks and spill upon
The myriad of figures dancing
In a forever mocking way."
^Such a beautiful way to put it.

When you started making the lines longer, I really thought that it would mess up the entire flow, but yet again you proved me wrong.

Overall, this poem has a pretty strong meaning behind it.

80/100

Thank you for the correction.
I try to have a beautiful way with words. Sometimes I succeed.
Heh, you should know that I’m terrific at making my poems flow nicely.
*Bows*

Kyna:

Outstanding!

"Everywhere a new threat, every day means distrust
And every stranger can turn out as a demonic enemy."

Friends and family get untrusted with paranoia also.

*bows*

I know they do. Everyone can be distrusted, it just depends on a lot of things really.

pretty good, write more. =)

ladyramone:

pretty good, write more. =)

Don’t call it pretty good. That’s just precisely above ok. It’s a lot better than that.
Also to me pretty good means it could have been a lot better and that constructive criticism is needed.

Yes, I’m overreacting. I’m very picky when it comes to comments on my poem since I take them rather seriously. =P

fantastic. that's all i can say. absolutly fantastic.

Thank you!

That was so great, I loved that!

*bows* I’m glad to hear. Um, except I didn’t hear it, I saw it because you wrote it eh... well, it’s just a figure of speech. [/rant]