I Think It's High Time For A Second Opinion

I
Can see it in your eyes
You’re masking your demise
Lying to us
Telling us that you’ll be fine
But I
Can tell you all the truth
You’re wishing for your youth
Veering closer
To the wall that will stand as proof

That you’re ever wishing for your life to be over
When all you’re ever doing is bringing us closer
You’re trying to convince yourself that we all take you for granted
But you’re always going to go home empty handed

No one can make the bed you made
No one can climb the wall you raised
No one here can ever know
What goes on inside your mind
And I say no
No No No
And I say no
No No No

You
Can state it as a fact
When we all know it’s an act
Playing victim
We all are going down that track
But you
Cling to each little word
Like every rumor you’ve heard
It’s all about you
My darling dear it’s just a word


That you’re ever wishing for your life to be over
When all you’re ever doing is bringing us closer
You’re trying to convince yourself that we all take you for granted
But you’re always going to go home empty handed

No one can make the bed you made
No one can climb the wall you raised
No one here can ever know
What goes on inside your mind
And I say no
No No No
And I say no
No No No

No No No
No No No
No No No
No No No

No one can make the bed you made
No one can climb the wall you raised
No one can blaze the trail you blazed
No one can make the life you made
No one can do what you can do
No one can come close you
No one ever really knows
No one ever really shows
No one can see what you can see
No one can live the life you lead
No one can ever tell you no
No one here can run the show

Cause no one can make the bed you made
The trail you blazed
The hearts you saved
No one can deny the chance
To let you dance
You need that chance
You need that chance
You need that chance

Some of the rhymes really annoyed me. Overall it was okay. This part I could really picture in a song as one of those parts where the singer stops singing and talks, if you know what I mean.

No one can make the bed you made
No one can climb the wall you raised
No one can blaze the trail you blazed
No one can make the life you made
No one can do what you can do
No one can come close you
No one ever really knows
No one ever really shows
No one can see what you can see
No one can live the life you lead
No one can ever tell you no
No one here can run the show

[Flawless Error]:

Some of the rhymes really annoyed me. Overall it was okay. This part I could really picture in a song as one of those parts where the singer stops singing and talks, if you know what I mean.

No one can make the bed you made
No one can climb the wall you raised
No one can blaze the trail you blazed
No one can make the life you made
No one can do what you can do
No one can come close you
No one ever really knows
No one ever really shows
No one can see what you can see
No one can live the life you lead
No one can ever tell you no
No one here can run the show

i love that part, it's really the only part of the song i like too much.

wow! that was fucking awesome! so beautiful

[Flawless Error]:

Some of the rhymes really annoyed me. Overall it was okay.

Ditto.

Its very much like a rock opera of sorts. Its got a very Pink Floyd DSOTM structure to it. The lyrics remind me of a Taking Back Sunday style which is always good. It shocks me how they can think up such catchy stuff and you've definitly got something going here. For example:

No one can make the bed you made
No one can climb the wall you raised
No one can blaze the trail you blazed
No one can make the life you made
No one can do what you can do
No one can come close you
No one ever really knows
No one ever really shows
No one can see what you can see
No one can live the life you lead
No one can ever tell you no
No one here can run the show

Is very like Eclipse by Pink Floyd (the last part of Dark Side of the Moon) in the way it is written, yet the lyrics themselves are pretty dark and personal. I could really imagine it being a classic album track.

I'm thinking some kind of 7-8 minute beast of a song here. I think if you got rid of the "no no no" part in the middle this would be one amazing poem. You're onto something here, keep it up!

I liked it

409 Coffeemaker:

Its very much like a rock opera of sorts. Its got a very Pink Floyd DSOTM structure to it. The lyrics remind me of a Taking Back Sunday style which is always good. It shocks me how they can think up such catchy stuff and you've definitly got something going here. For example:

No one can make the bed you made
No one can climb the wall you raised
No one can blaze the trail you blazed
No one can make the life you made
No one can do what you can do
No one can come close you
No one ever really knows
No one ever really shows
No one can see what you can see
No one can live the life you lead
No one can ever tell you no
No one here can run the show

Is very like Eclipse by Pink Floyd (the last part of Dark Side of the Moon) in the way it is written, yet the lyrics themselves are pretty dark and personal. I could really imagine it being a classic album track.

I'm thinking some kind of 7-8 minute beast of a song here. I think if you got rid of the "no no no" part in the middle this would be one amazing poem. You're onto something here, keep it up!

that's what i was thinking too...thank you for understanding! lol.