Dolphin

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Kyna
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Kyna
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May 23rd, 2006 at 11:35pm
A task is a mission
to keep me giong forward
here's a hint
will I break this current
if I keep swimming
toward it or will I
get to safety faster if
I swim with the flow
and reach for higher ground
to walk on and steer clear
of the flood
to move like a dolphin
but go the opposite direction
they can stay there
that is their home
I am shorebound
that's my task
I am headed for the shore
and my mission
to help others reach it
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
King For A Couple Of Days
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Mibba
May 24th, 2006 at 02:59pm
It was good, only you might want to add some form of punctuation to it. Wink It was very hard to read.
Kyna
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Kyna
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May 24th, 2006 at 05:13pm
[Flawless Error]:
It was good, only you might want to add some form of punctuation to it. Wink It was very hard to read.


Punctuation I shall add to my next poem.
Peter Petrelli
King For A Couple Of Days
Peter Petrelli
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May 25th, 2006 at 08:28am
But it had a sweet idea to it. Very Happy Uh huh. Pretty good.
rollerpig
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rollerpig
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May 25th, 2006 at 08:40am
Like it.
Escaped Mental Patient
Jackass
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Mibba
May 25th, 2006 at 11:16am
good.....I like it
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