Hearts Smashed By The Boy/Girl Thing

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Skullivan.[Im Not Okay]
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Skullivan.[Im Not Okay]
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May 24th, 2006 at 03:41pm
She sits alone,
Confused and unloved.
Watching his every move,
She's hypnotized.

She cannot sleep,
For thoughts of him,
Keep her tears falling,
Staining her pillow.

She's getting hurt,
He can't see it,
In her eyes,
He's pure perfection.

She can't take it,
This mixed up feeling,
Warping her mind,
Now nothing makes sense.

She's falling down,
Though icy air,
Spreads her arms,
And closes her eyes.

She waits for the crash,
The sign that her pain,
Is complete.
It’s all over now.
It’s over now...
B.J
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May 24th, 2006 at 03:45pm
Oh I like that
nice job Up
Maiku's Kind Ghost
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Mibba
May 24th, 2006 at 03:46pm
DARK..I LIKE THAT Cool
Skullivan.[Im Not Okay]
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Skullivan.[Im Not Okay]
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May 24th, 2006 at 03:50pm
^^ Thank you! Smile
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
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Mibba
May 24th, 2006 at 04:40pm
I suppose it's good, but it didn't seem terribly original to me. Might try some metaphors next time? :]
darkuredi
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May 24th, 2006 at 04:45pm
Damn... I like it - I like it a lot.
Skullivan.[Im Not Okay]
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May 25th, 2006 at 01:58am
thank you for your comments! critsim noted for next time Smile
clark
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May 25th, 2006 at 02:30am
I like it. Very Happy
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