Battle scenes

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What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451	May 24th, 2006 at 05:38pm Battle scenes Explosions deep inside my head, Followed by waves of suffering. The whistling sound of bullets Clings to every memory. And smoke fumes rasp through My sore throat with each breath. Sometimes it feels as if That gory, scarlet mud Seeped through my skin And now it floods Every sullen vein. Hand grenade splinter snatched Away an already distorted vision. But the images keep playing Behind tired eyelids. Screams echo in my mind now Just like they did all days long. Wonder if that dark rain Washed away all tears That pooled on the inside And wholly drained All empathy to come. Endless miles wore trough time So much that all traces of youth Withered and fell from my face. Only pictures left, Painted upon indignant features In nuances of lingering fear. Like flashes in my dark, Yet so colored world, They appear over and over Those fragments of Jagged battle scenes.
B.J Falling In Love With The Board Age: - Gender: Male Posts: 8105	May 24th, 2006 at 05:44pm wow great imagery there O_O awesome
Kyna Geek Age: - Gender: - Posts: 435	May 24th, 2006 at 06:28pm (lol) I can't stand puntuation with incomplete sentances. The poem is good though.
Maiku's Kind Ghost King For A Couple Of Days Age: - Gender: - Posts: 2102	May 24th, 2006 at 06:30pm nice
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921	May 24th, 2006 at 06:42pm Really good! Beautiful flow, by the way.
What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451	May 25th, 2006 at 06:30am Thank you, dear. Kyna: I can't stand puntuation with incomplete sentances. What do you mean by incomplete sentences? Just because the row ends the sentence doesn’t have to end. It can continue. Therefore the full stop appears first on the second row (or third and so on). It got to do with the structure and the flow.
Inari King For A Couple Of Days Age: 37 Gender: Female Posts: 2538	May 25th, 2006 at 08:05am Beautiful. I love the way you use imagery.
Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161	May 25th, 2006 at 08:25am Awesomeness I love your war imagery, honey. As always
What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451	May 25th, 2006 at 09:25am Thank you, my poetic butterflies.
What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451	May 26th, 2006 at 09:38am B.J: wow great imagery there O_O awesome Thanks. I try. =]
snowcherry King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 3912	May 26th, 2006 at 06:54pm That one was awsome, I loved it.
xXx depressed_emo xXx Geek Age: - Gender: - Posts: 186	May 26th, 2006 at 09:28pm not one u see every day but i like it
What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451	May 28th, 2006 at 07:04am I didn’t quite get that, but thanks. I think… snowcherry: thank you, dear. ^_^
Meski Addict Age: 32 Gender: Male Posts: 14856	May 28th, 2006 at 07:06am Your poems impress me and i´m not lying!!
Babi Kid Rachy King For A Couple Of Days Age: 31 Gender: Female Posts: 4512	May 28th, 2006 at 08:16am You should be poem writer when you're older. ONE OF MY FAVOURITE POEM BY YOU.
What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451	May 29th, 2006 at 02:14pm When I’m older? Like, how old? 20? 30? I’m 18 within a week, is that older? Thank you, my dear.

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