IN NEED OF TITLE. fanks joo =D

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Kyna Geek Age: - Gender: - Posts: 435	May 27th, 2006 at 11:52am I could not name it either. Perhaps you could go with the first two words... "Sacred silence" The poem is outstanding, however. It makes a really good point, that everything in the world still happens while two people are not paying attention to it. Yes, that can be a dangerous thing also... it has been shown in enough movies already.
What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 2451	May 27th, 2006 at 12:02pm The words "phoenix hearts" stuck so that might be a good title. I love the first stanza. Great imagery. Beautiful. Don’t like the second. Too cliché. A bit un-poetic. Like the last one. Good structure. The full stop at the last but one line messes up the flow though. I think I know which kinda feeling you were going for but unfortunately it didn’t work.
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 2921	May 27th, 2006 at 12:10pm I'm in love with the last stanza. The first one was good too, but the second one didn't do anything for me. Like Rose said. EDIT: TYPOOOO. XD
What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 2451	May 27th, 2006 at 12:14pm Teh Coolest Mohican....: thanks. I'll work on it! You're very welcome. Good. That makes me happy. See? I'm sure you will write totally awesome poems soon.
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 2921	May 27th, 2006 at 12:25pm Teh Coolest Mohican....: the last one? O_O Typo, sorry. My first post is edited. XD
What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 2451	May 27th, 2006 at 12:26pm Teh Coolest Mohican....: mock horror YOU MEAN I DON'T NOW?! ZOMGAWSH That's what I mean. But you're close
What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 2451	May 27th, 2006 at 12:31pm You’re muchly welcome. ^-^ Me? One of the most talented? Wow. Thank you, dear.
What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 2451	May 27th, 2006 at 12:36pm I was just kinda surprised. I always am when someone thinks I’m good at something. [/off topic]

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