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Geek
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Posts: 192 | May 28th, 2006 at 03:08pm Black bird
One who flies high
in the evening sky
one who takes flight
who is full of might
one who flies in the rain
and in moments dark and vain
for you my little friend
your days will never end.
That is my poem for English class and its problably my best. |
Miley Cyrus
Basket Case
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 15185
 | May 28th, 2006 at 03:22pm Eh, I don't like it much. No offense, but it seems pretty average. |
newagecarny
Was Here Two Weeks Ago
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 42495
 | May 28th, 2006 at 04:14pm It's good. The rhyming isn't that forced at all. I might be wrong, though. |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 2921
| May 28th, 2006 at 05:43pm Ella:It's good. The rhyming isn't that forced at all. I might be wrong, though. The first half the rhyming got to me. It's the rest that isn't forced. Like sheepless and redundant said, it's pretty average. |
