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votefordisco Rotting On Here Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 45710	June 1st, 2006 at 04:03am I think she had some kind of problem But she'd never talk to me, I never saw her face nor broke her gaze I never saw her leave. I'm not sure if she was real Or just a vivid dream, An angel sent to teach me love So something more would seem. Comments would be greatly appreiciated xx
rollerpig GSBitch Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 62283	June 1st, 2006 at 09:50am Hmm .. I like it! I dunno why ..
newagecarny Was Here Two Weeks Ago Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 42495	June 1st, 2006 at 10:04am ADORE the second stanza.
Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161	June 1st, 2006 at 10:07am I really loved it It was real pretty, real sweet. Awwwww. But the flow was off badly. The rhyming didn't sound forced... but... it would sound better with a good rhythm. But I do really like it
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921	June 1st, 2006 at 02:42pm Ella: ADORE the second stanza. Me too. =]
votefordisco Rotting On Here Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 45710	June 1st, 2006 at 11:54pm Wow thanks for all of the comments guys! I know the flow isn't great or anything and the rythm is a bit shite... It's just something I quickly wrote down the other day and I couldn't be bothered to make it perfect. I'm generally just not very good at rythm anyway...Meh. Thanks again! xx

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