Picture Perfect Self Distruction

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Skullivan.[Im Not Okay] Geek Age: - Gender: - Posts: 225	June 4th, 2006 at 09:33am It’s a work in progress. Ways on how to improve it are welcome. Darkest fires, Burn deepest souls, Of misunderstood angels, That take human form. A strange kind of beauty, Portrayed by blood soaked sheets, And raging music, Which covers the screaming. Warped minds, Stand under the rain, Icy chill send shivers, ThRough poison veins
Kurtni Admin Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 34289	June 4th, 2006 at 09:39am Wow, I wouldnt change anything, I like the simplicity, but it isn't all black and white either. Great Job.
snowcherry King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 3912	June 4th, 2006 at 10:47am Yeah, I like it as well. I have no idea how to make it better, because it's really cool as it is now.
Inari King For A Couple Of Days Age: 37 Gender: Female Posts: 2538	June 4th, 2006 at 12:14pm Beautiful.
Skullivan.[Im Not Okay] Geek Age: - Gender: - Posts: 225	June 4th, 2006 at 12:22pm Thanks everyone
newagecarny Was Here Two Weeks Ago Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 42495	June 4th, 2006 at 12:27pm Darkest fires, Burn deepest souls, Of misunderstood angels, That take human form. A strange kind of beauty, Portrayed by blood soaked sheets, And raging music, Which covers the screaming. ^I'd change that line to something else like;"Embracing the screams." Warped minds, Stand under the rain, Icy chills send shivers, Through poison veins ^I think you meant that? Overall, pretty good for something that short
Skullivan.[Im Not Okay] Geek Age: - Gender: - Posts: 225	June 4th, 2006 at 12:31pm Ella: Darkest fires, Burn deepest souls, Of misunderstood angels, That take human form. A strange kind of beauty, Portrayed by blood soaked sheets, And raging music, Which covers the screaming. ^I'd change that line to something else like;"Embracing the screams." Warped minds, Stand under the rain, Icy chills send shivers, Through poison veins ^I think you meant that? Overall, pretty good for something that short hits self in head ive seriously got to start checking my stuff properly! Thanks for the suggestions!
newagecarny Was Here Two Weeks Ago Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 42495	June 4th, 2006 at 12:40pm Don't mention it.
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921	June 4th, 2006 at 01:11pm I like that.
CrazyEyes Geek Age: - Gender: Female Posts: 112	June 5th, 2006 at 08:31pm Wow, that was awesome.
neil patrick harris. Jackass Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 1678	June 6th, 2006 at 01:10am that's alright...that's amazing
Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161	June 6th, 2006 at 06:25am Awwww, I really liked that. Sweet and simple, and really worked.
--xSarahx-- Idiot Age: - Gender: - Posts: 962	June 6th, 2006 at 07:35am OOOooOOOOoooo I like it
Skullivan.[Im Not Okay] Geek Age: - Gender: - Posts: 225	June 6th, 2006 at 11:29am aww! thanks alot everyone
xXx depressed_emo xXx Geek Age: - Gender: - Posts: 186	June 8th, 2006 at 06:52am short and effective

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