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Santa Billie
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 8285 | June 9th, 2006 at 05:24pm She started out as a beautiful belle
Trapped in a whore house's dungeon cell
This life soon seemed to suit her well
Marvelous how much a body could sell
To this sweet girl you may say "farewell"
She thinks it's heaven; we know it's... |
spill_no_sick
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 31
Gender: -
Posts: 8588 | June 9th, 2006 at 05:48pm for such a short poem a lot of it was forced
it was alright, but most hookers don't enjoy their jobs.....so you could have made it a stripper |
Santa Billie
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 8285 | June 9th, 2006 at 05:51pm spill_no_sick:for such a short poem a lot of it was forced
it was alright, but most hookers don't enjoy their jobs.....so you could have made it a stripper
THAT WAS THE POINT OF THE POEM.
To show the contrast between the good and bad sides of it.
Maybe some people DO enjoy the job, ever think about that?
And I purposely used that rhyme scheme so that by the end, it was
made obvious that the last word is "hell".
The narrator missed the word, because the narrator doesn't know what
the girl is going through, and maybe to the girl, this isn't hell.
Does ANYONE get it? |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 2921
 | June 9th, 2006 at 05:57pm From your explanation, that was actually pretty good. |
snowcherry
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 3912 | June 9th, 2006 at 06:19pm Sure I got it. lol
I actually like it.
It seems a bit forced,
but it has something catchy about it. |
sinine
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 2349 | June 9th, 2006 at 06:22pm I love it. It's pretty. But i'm pretty fucked up, so don't listen to me... |
spill_no_sick
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 31
Gender: -
Posts: 8588 | June 9th, 2006 at 06:24pm I got it, but you forced the rhyme
and I just said that there are more strippers who enjoy job than prostitutes |
I fought the lawn.
Idiot
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 929 | June 9th, 2006 at 06:36pm I like it, I like it a lot. |
Sara.
This Board Is My Home
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 31155 | June 9th, 2006 at 06:37pm spill_no_sick:for such a short poem a lot of it was forced
it was alright, but most hookers don't enjoy their jobs.....so you could have made it a stripper |
Dehren McGhengland
Rotting On Here
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 49206 | June 9th, 2006 at 07:01pm For some reason, I can't make up my mind about this poem.  |
D-A-N-I
Idiot
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 885 | June 9th, 2006 at 07:05pm it was pretty good, it was short and to the point. Though, I really don't get what it's supposed to be about.. |
Santa Billie
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 8285 | June 10th, 2006 at 03:49pm Pepperpot.:For some reason, I can't make up my mind about this poem.
You don't have to "make up your mind".
What's with people either liking it or hating it?
Why can't you say something else, like "This line bothers me" or "I would like it better but..."
or if it's confusing, say so...it doesn't have to be "I like it" or "I don't like it" or "I can't decide if I like it" |
