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rage;love;clark
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Posts: 494 | June 10th, 2006 at 02:08am I tried to freeverse a tad
opened me up a bit
Never has a thing
Meant so much to me
Like nothing really matters
Out in the cold
Out on the streets
And you’re right here with me
Your eyes are so deep
You could fall into them
Like an ocean of your nightmares
Heavy thoughts
Incredible dreams
And you’re still right here by me
Your lips make me shake
Soft to the touch of my own
Like it was meant to happen either way
Whether or not
You felt the need
And you’re still right here by me
I still get nervous
Even though I know you love me
Like something out of a romance movie
I see you cry
I start crying
And you’re still right here by me
I love you
And you love me
Like everything that we aspired to have
Dr. Pepper lips
And ocean blue eyes
And you’re still right here by me
I love you courtney |
OMG, Shoes.
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Posts: 332 | June 10th, 2006 at 02:11am Cute :] |
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Posts: 78 | June 10th, 2006 at 07:03am i like free verse.
it's a hole lot easier for me, i dont have to worry about fucking rhyming hehe.
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rage;love;clark
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Posts: 494 | June 10th, 2006 at 09:37am InNoSence:i like free verse.
it's a hole lot easier for me, i dont have to worry about fucking rhyming hehe.
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yeah it was pretty cool
thanks d00d |
Meski
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 | June 10th, 2006 at 09:50am Ya I think free verse is better, it gives you more freedom while writing a poem like this one which deserves a 10! XD |
rage;love;clark
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Posts: 494 | June 10th, 2006 at 10:19am Spain_World_Cup_Winners:Ya I think free verse is better, it gives you more freedom while writing a poem like this one which deserves a 10! XD
10? out of 100? oh man...i got a 1 out of 10 
lol jk jk
thanks d00d |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
King For A Couple Of Days
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 | June 10th, 2006 at 11:15am Your lips make me shake
Soft to the touch of my own
Like it was meant to happen either way
Whether or not
You felt the need
And you’re still right here by me
That was awesome, my friend.  |
Zoie
Falling In Love With The Board
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Posts: 6370 | June 10th, 2006 at 11:17am I really like that. Especiall this part
Your eyes are so deep
You could fall into them
Like an ocean of your nightmares
Heavy thoughts
Incredible dreams
And you’re still right here by me |
rage;love;clark
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Posts: 494 | June 10th, 2006 at 01:30pm Hardcore Panda!!1:Your lips make me shake
Soft to the touch of my own
Like it was meant to happen either way
Whether or not
You felt the need
And you’re still right here by me
That was awesome, my friend.
thank you very much! |
rage;love;clark
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Posts: 494 | June 10th, 2006 at 01:31pm high_on_juicy_fruit:I really like that. Especiall this part
Your eyes are so deep
You could fall into them
Like an ocean of your nightmares
Heavy thoughts
Incredible dreams
And you’re still right here by me
thanks!
all i had to do was go free verse O.o |
What's in a name?
King For A Couple Of Days
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| June 10th, 2006 at 02:06pm Free verse is often better because it’s so hard to do rhyming poems that doesn’t seem forced.
I really like the song/poem. |
rage;love;clark
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Posts: 494 | June 10th, 2006 at 02:09pm What's in a name?:Free verse is often better because it’s so hard to do rhyming poems that doesn’t seem forced.
I really like the song/poem.
thank you  |
Dehren McGhengland
Rotting On Here
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Posts: 49206 | June 10th, 2006 at 02:12pm Hardcore Panda!!1:Your lips make me shake
Soft to the touch of my own
Like it was meant to happen either way
Whether or not
You felt the need
And you’re still right here by me
Was my favourite stanza aswell.
Very nice poem. Good job. |
CrazyEyes
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Posts: 112 | June 10th, 2006 at 07:06pm high_on_juicy_fruit:I really like that. Especiall this part
Your eyes are so deep
You could fall into them
Like an ocean of your nightmares
Heavy thoughts
Incredible dreams
And you’re still right here by me
That was my favorite part too. Awesome. |
newagecarny
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| June 10th, 2006 at 07:36pm Mediocre. |
rage;love;clark
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Posts: 494 | June 11th, 2006 at 12:02pm Ella:Mediocre.
could you please explain why?
i mean i like criticism
but that didn't help at all |
