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snowcherry King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 3912	June 12th, 2006 at 12:36pm I didn't like the last bit of the last line, but the rest was cool.
snowcherry King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 3912	June 12th, 2006 at 12:52pm If you ask me, yeah.
rollerpig GSBitch Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 62283	June 12th, 2006 at 12:56pm I agree, the end could be better. But I like it.
Inari King For A Couple Of Days Age: 37 Gender: Female Posts: 2538	June 12th, 2006 at 12:56pm Coolies. I prefer the other line as well.
snowcherry King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 3912	June 12th, 2006 at 12:57pm [x]Poetic Disaster[x]: hokay thanks! No problem.
Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161	June 12th, 2006 at 01:17pm Uh huh, I agree with everyone else. Pretty damn good.
Meski Addict Age: 32 Gender: Male Posts: 14856	June 12th, 2006 at 01:20pm I agree too, the poem was very good, I like it, it sounds like me
tAcOs!-Jay Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie Age: 34 Gender: Male Posts: 83	June 12th, 2006 at 02:36pm kool very very kool to tell u the truth i like it as it is XD
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921	June 12th, 2006 at 02:37pm w00t some more pwnage. Yeah, the last line has some definite flow issues; you should change it.
Toxic Teeth Idiot Age: 30 Gender: Female Posts: 645	June 12th, 2006 at 02:50pm yeah i like it just the way it is.......... either line works
Kurtni Admin Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 34289	June 12th, 2006 at 03:50pm i think the line you have originally was much better than the one you have now, it was prettier.

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