I honestly can’t quite comprehend
it myself as to why I am so fascinated
by them-
Maybe it’s the mystery. Oh yes,
there’s shadows that encircle
around them- forming a glorious,
dark mist of allure. They’re the
dark alley, cringing as the sunlight
emerges, threatening to take hold.
I stand below the sun and watch.
Every time I wait, I see the subtle
movements that just intrigue me more…
Maybe it’s the true but different
beauty that resonates off of them.
It’s like watching the green grass grow
with a certain feeling of nostalgia
washing over our insignificant lives.
But they…? They are everything.
They are nothing. You can either be
too verbose or too unvoiced. But with me-
I just believe that I silently speak.
I suppose that when it comes to these
matters of utter magnetism, one could
claim that those being observed might
be both mysterious and beautiful. I
believe they do… like two different
melodies of the sky and earth.
Inari King For A Couple Of Days Age: 37 Gender: Female Posts: 2538
I think your officially the best poet on GSB. I love your style of writting, you don't word things like all the other people, you have a sense of individuality, and you're not a dictionary poet either, I can't stand people who write like that, it isnt even poetry then, anyone can look words up that sound elaborate, but you're above that. I particuallry enjoyed the second stanza, it had some nice phrasing and language in it. You remind me of an old poet but I can't think of his name, but he was one of my favorites.
snowcherry King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 3912
I think your officially the best poet on GSB. I love your style of writting, you don't word things like all the other people, you have a sense of individuality, and you're not a dictionary poet either, I can't stand people who write like that, it isnt even poetry then, anyone can look words up that sound elaborate, but you're above that. I particuallry enjoyed the second stanza, it had some nice phrasing and language in it. You remind me of an old poet but I can't think of his name, but he was one of my favorites.
Wow. Thanks.
newagecarny Was Here Two Weeks Ago Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 42495
June 12th, 2006 at 06:31pm
It's simply fantastic, many people here should look up to you. It seriously takes REAL talent to write this, not some sugarcoated vocabulary;
"But they…? They are everything.
They are nothing. You can either be
too verbose or too unvoiced. But with me-
I just believe that I silently speak."
And I won't even start talking about the last stanza/ending. It completely blew me away.
Honesty, if I was given a job to improve/change it I would have nothing to say. You used all the things it needed, yet didn't overdo it. I am really happy we have someone like you among us.
It's simply fantastic, many people here should look up to you. It seriously takes REAL talent to write this, not some sugarcoated vocabulary;
"But they…? They are everything.
They are nothing. You can either be
too verbose or too unvoiced. But with me-
I just believe that I silently speak."
And I won't even start talking about the last stanza/ending. It completely blew me away.
Honesty, if I was given a job to improve/change it I would have nothing to say. You used all the things it needed, yet didn't overdo it. I am really happy we have someone like you among us.
Amen to that.
I need to move to whereever it is that you teach so you can be my English Teacher (wait_what is going to be a teacher for those of you who think im crazy)There is so much I could learn from you.
I need to move to whereever it is that you teach so you can be my English Teacher (wait_what is going to be a teacher for those of you who think im crazy)There is so much I could learn from you.
Haha. If you're still in high school when I get out of college...
But thanks for all the kind words, everyone.
Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161
June 13th, 2006 at 01:13pm
Stunning. I don't really have any more to say. It's amazing.
Wow. Thanks. 
