Yes...My second poem.Or third. But I'm not keeping track. XD...The title of this poem, "Here It's December......Everyday", is a line in the song, "Love Like Winter" by AFI. Oh look! This poem rhymes! lmao
Here It's December......Everyday
December moon,
Shines soon.
Darkness falls,
A monster brawls.
Shiny teeth,
Begins to speak.
Run away,
You won't see day.
Stay right there,
You cannot bear.
You are sane,
You feel the pain.
Ripped to flesh,
You are a mess.
Your draining blood,
Would be a flood.
Next night,
You repeat your fright.
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921
it was random phrases thrown together. The lines were short and Choppy and the poem never seemed to go anywhere.
tAcOs!-Jay Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie Age: 34 Gender: Male Posts: 83
June 14th, 2006 at 07:55pm
the poem didnt really follow n e thing it was just thrown out there or w/e it was ok but idk u need to get a story line or w/e so it actually tells u something about n e thing...........not trying to be mean or n e thing but..............it wasnt all that good.......... to me
newagecarny Was Here Two Weeks Ago Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 42495
June 15th, 2006 at 06:18am
I_worship_tre_Cool:
it was random phrases thrown together. The lines were short and Choppy and the poem never seemed to go anywhere.
Agreed.
Also:
"Shiny teeth,
Begins to speak."
"Your draining blood,
Would be a flood."
Forced.
"Ripped to flesh,
You are a mess. "
That's not a real rhyme.
