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Ahhhh!
Jackass
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Posts: 1372 | July 1st, 2006 at 10:42pm Life is what you make it
And I'm sure you could make it better
I'll Load the bullets, cock the gun
But I'll never pull the trigger
That's up to you-
And I hope-
That you can see this through
It's nothing new-
But now-
You need to think to what you knew
CHORUS
You've got a family
And friends
And people with love to send
So take your time
Just think
It's not time for your life to end
Remember that time you slit your wrist
The day you made your mother cry
I'll Load the bullets, cock the gun
But I hope we dont say good bye
Not now-
Not soon-
I'm saying this for me and you
It's true-
And I know-
You think your life is long past overdue
REPEAT CHORUS
I'll load the bullets
'Cause I know that you can't do it
I'll turn over the hour glass
And try and help you through it-
Depression!
I'll cock the gun
'Cause I know you won't shoot it
I'll sit and talk with you
And try and help you through it-
Depression!
Depression!
REPEAT CHORUS
!FADES OUT!
Live long
Sleep well
Bullet to the brain
For heaven or for hell
Live long
Sleep well
Bullet to the brain
For heaven or for hell
Live long
Sleep well
Bullet to the brain
For heaven or for hell |
josh_oliday23
Geek
Age: 35
Gender: Male
Posts: 267 | July 2nd, 2006 at 02:18am That is great! I would love to hear that for real. I love the fade out part a lot. |
Ahhhh!
Jackass
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Posts: 1372 | July 2nd, 2006 at 09:32am Thanks a lot! I really like that part too. |
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Jackass
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Posts: 1372 | July 2nd, 2006 at 10:44pm what the fuck man? Why no replys? Come onnnnnnnnnnnnnn... |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 2921
 | July 2nd, 2006 at 10:53pm Wow, I can so imagine that to some music. It flows great and it's catchy. The rhyme works really well, too. Great job!  |
steady riot.
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 2907 | July 2nd, 2006 at 11:33pm Eh, it was okay. Sounds pretty forced. |
losers_are_cool
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 4120 | July 3rd, 2006 at 01:48am Sam, that was excellent.
I don't think it sounded forced at all. More like the rhyme just came naturally. It was meant to be there.
I like the subject too. It's a fairly common one, but to me you seemed to pull it off differently than most people. What most people would make a somewhat darkish song, you made it sound light and...peppy. lol Not peppy but, nice.
I applaud.  |
Ahhhh!
Jackass
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Posts: 1372 | July 4th, 2006 at 12:48am losers_are_cool:Sam, that was excellent.
I don't think it sounded forced at all. More like the rhyme just came naturally. It was meant to be there.
I like the subject too. It's a fairly common one, but to me you seemed to pull it off differently than most people. What most people would make a somewhat darkish song, you made it sound light and...peppy. lol Not peppy but, nice.
I applaud. Thanks! How do you know my name?
Just reading it, it does sound a little forced, but with the rythm i've got with it it goes well. |
Yes I Am God
Basket Case
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 15946 | July 4th, 2006 at 12:52am Ahhhh!:
Just reading it, it does sound a little forced, but with the rythm i've got with it it goes well.
Have you written music for it?
Cuz.. you should.
I like it. But it'd be better morphed into a song.
O_o. |
peas lover.
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 3502
| July 4th, 2006 at 05:24am awesome, i wanna hear it with some music!!! |
What's in a name?
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 2451
| July 4th, 2006 at 08:34am losers_are_cool:Sam, that was excellent.
I don't think it sounded forced at all. More like the rhyme just came naturally. It was meant to be there.
I like the subject too. It's a fairly common one, but to me you seemed to pull it off differently than most people. What most people would make a somewhat darkish song, you made it sound light and...peppy. lol Not peppy but, nice.
I applaud.
^Yeah
It felt like a hybrid between Linkin´ Parks and Papa Roach’s lyrics though. Which isn’t a bad thing. At all.  |
losers_are_cool
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 4120 | July 4th, 2006 at 10:51am Ahhhh!:losers_are_cool:Sam, that was excellent.
I don't think it sounded forced at all. More like the rhyme just came naturally. It was meant to be there.
I like the subject too. It's a fairly common one, but to me you seemed to pull it off differently than most people. What most people would make a somewhat darkish song, you made it sound light and...peppy. lol Not peppy but, nice.
I applaud. Thanks! How do you know my name?
Just reading it, it does sound a little forced, but with the rythm i've got with it it goes well.  We talked a while ago, when I came on GSB more often. I hardly ever forget people's names though. I'm Gwen, if that helps.
Yeah, I have a feeling it would be pretty amazing to music, and that would get rid of everyone's thoughts of forced rhymes. |
xXx depressed_emo xXx
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Posts: 186 | July 5th, 2006 at 06:52am Boiled Frogs.:Eh, it was okay. Sounds pretty forced.
pfftt........it doesnt sound forced
it was great dude |
