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Rotten
Idiot
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 671
 | July 9th, 2006 at 07:36pm This is another song from West Virginia about how I had to say goodbye to a friend prematurely and how it was hard.
You open the door and pause for a time
Letting sentiments seep though my shield
Although our time is running out
I cannot admit to this yield
So now you're a mere memory
Frozen in time inside my head
but still I wonder what you're doing
And if you remember our goodbye
Your face keeps my foot off the pedal
And I can no longer fake a brave face
Your memory has not yet left me
But your touch I cannot replace
(chorus)
Through everything I've done and said
I blame you for not getting the hint
I would rather leave without a word
Than have to go through this
Just like a bad romance movie
I leave you behind on the road
Though you shake off what just happened
My aching eyes shift into overload
As I drive away as fast as I can
And you shrink in my rearview mirror
I finally let go what I held back from you
And my true feelings are made clearer
Looking away from you at last
My vision is damp and blurred
I don't regret that it's over
I should just be glad it occured |
Feeling It Yet?
Geek
Age: -
Gender: Female
Posts: 369 | July 9th, 2006 at 07:44pm woah |
Rotten
Idiot
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 671
| July 9th, 2006 at 08:12pm Is that a good woah or a bad one? |
Santa Billie
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 8285 | July 9th, 2006 at 08:14pm That's really nice, I love the turning point in the last two stanzas.
You write well  |
Rotten
Idiot
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 671
| July 9th, 2006 at 09:08pm Thanks! This one really means a lot to me, so I'm glad you like it. |
xRAWR<3
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 9 | July 9th, 2006 at 09:10pm Very moving, you're an excellent poet.  |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 2921
 | July 9th, 2006 at 09:17pm I super love this one. One thing, though. I don't think it really makes sense to use the word yield in the last line of the first stanza. It sounds grammatically incorrect. |
Inari
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 37
Gender: Female
Posts: 2538 | July 10th, 2006 at 03:48am Awww.
That's really sad but sweet. |
Nathalie.
Addict
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 11756 | July 10th, 2006 at 05:52am Amazing! |
Rotten
Idiot
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 671
| July 10th, 2006 at 09:14am Thanks! And I can see what you mean with the whole yield thing. I wrote this at midnight, so the grammar may suck. Thanks for pointing that out. |
B.J
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: -
Gender: Male
Posts: 8105 | July 10th, 2006 at 09:34am wow I like this a lot!
good job |
Rotten
Idiot
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 671
| July 10th, 2006 at 10:14am thanks very much! |
