Milk
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  | July 11th, 2006 at 12:28am This uses the rhyming pattern A,B,C,A It's not very good... just take a look and tell me what you think
Get a Grip
Once loved, twice forgiven
The mask with only one face
Desperately needs renewal
Needles pumped and driven
Wandering icons, beacons of hope
The sadistic manoeuvre of the needle
Break the barrier once again
Uncontrolled beats don't cope
Whispered remedies of the mind
One can only face the truth
Discreet can only go so far
After all that was left behind
Believe in what there is left
Your anguish is tragic
Your future is bleak
Victim of sanity theft
Allowing just one slip
Will lead into habits, worse
Lying on your death bed
When will you get a grip? |
Inari
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Posts: 2538 | July 11th, 2006 at 05:01am Wow.
I really liked that. |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
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| July 11th, 2006 at 11:18am I liked this a lot as well. Especially the first stanza. |
snowcherry
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Posts: 3912 | July 11th, 2006 at 02:11pm Wow, that was really cool. |
paper shoes
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Posts: 34269 | July 11th, 2006 at 03:57pm I liked it.
Goooood. |
Milk
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 3741
| July 12th, 2006 at 01:27am =D |
