I dont really have a title for this...

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B.J
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July 11th, 2006 at 06:40am
But I'mma post it anyway
its kind of morbid... I dont normally write as morbid as this
but it was inspired by this image
Image
here goes anyway


The roped noose
So long and loose
Till she steps in
and death swings her way
gripping her tightly
claws at her neck
taking her breath away

Her broken heart
right from the start
could never possibly mend
Alcohol, pills and rope
now she'll never
breathe again

Left to a corpse
Without remorse
Her body lifless
Rotting with decay
Parlour of People
Slient, while the
March begins to play

She wrote about fears
page dotted with tears
that this was all she could take
"Now there can simply
be one less heart
left to break"

comments please, and maybe suggestions for a title?
Nathalie.
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July 11th, 2006 at 07:37am
I love it.
Inari
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July 11th, 2006 at 09:02am
Ooooh I like the last verse you added.
Morbid? Kind of.
Poetic? Definately.
B.J
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July 11th, 2006 at 09:15am
thank you so much
thanks Inari
Kiss:
igotsosickofcrying
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July 11th, 2006 at 09:18am
I love it!But I said that before...
My favorite line: March begins to play
btw..inspired by what image?Cool
B.J
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July 11th, 2006 at 09:24am
it was also inspired by a picture of a noose
Brendon Urie..
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Mibba
July 12th, 2006 at 05:33pm
Fuck.

I mean, just fuck.

Wow.
newagecarny
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Mibba
July 12th, 2006 at 05:36pm
YES.

You improved a lot.
I didn't really like the second stanza but the last two were just wonderfully put together

Left to a corpse
Without remorse
Her body lifless
Rotting with decay
Parlour of People
Slient, while the
March begins to play

She wrote about fears
page dotted with tears
that this was all she could take
"Now there can simply
be one less heart
left to break"


That was great.
Toxic Teeth
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July 12th, 2006 at 05:39pm
WOW!
That is all I have to say......
B.J
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July 12th, 2006 at 05:47pm
Ella:
YES.

You improved a lot.
I didn't really like the second stanza but the last two were just wonderfully put together

Left to a corpse
Without remorse
Her body lifless
Rotting with decay
Parlour of People
Slient, while the
March begins to play

She wrote about fears
page dotted with tears
that this was all she could take
"Now there can simply
be one less heart
left to break"


That was great.

aww thank you Ella
I never normally write about these things... but I was just sort of struck you know <3 thank you Kiss
thank all of you
I wasnt happy with the second stanza, but I think I'll leave it in anyway
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