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B.J Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: - Gender: Male Posts: 8105 | July 11th, 2006 at 06:40am But I'mma post it anyway
its kind of morbid... I dont normally write as morbid as this
but it was inspired by this image

here goes anyway
The roped noose
So long and loose
Till she steps in
and death swings her way
gripping her tightly
claws at her neck
taking her breath away
Her broken heart
right from the start
could never possibly mend
Alcohol, pills and rope
now she'll never
breathe again
Left to a corpse
Without remorse
Her body lifless
Rotting with decay
Parlour of People
Slient, while the
March begins to play
She wrote about fears
page dotted with tears
that this was all she could take
"Now there can simply
be one less heart
left to break"
comments please, and maybe suggestions for a title? |
Nathalie. Addict
 Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 11756 | July 11th, 2006 at 07:37am I love it. |
Inari King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 37 Gender: Female Posts: 2538 | July 11th, 2006 at 09:02am Ooooh I like the last verse you added.
Morbid? Kind of.
Poetic? Definately. |
B.J Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: - Gender: Male Posts: 8105 | July 11th, 2006 at 09:15am thank you so much
thanks Inari
 : |
igotsosickofcrying King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 3206 | July 11th, 2006 at 09:18am I love it!But I said that before...
My favorite line: March begins to play
btw..inspired by what image?  |
B.J Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: - Gender: Male Posts: 8105 | July 11th, 2006 at 09:24am it was also inspired by a picture of a noose |
Brendon Urie.. King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 37 Gender: Female Posts: 2394
| July 12th, 2006 at 05:33pm Fuck.
I mean, just fuck.
Wow. |
newagecarny Was Here Two Weeks Ago
 Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 42495
| July 12th, 2006 at 05:36pm YES.
You improved a lot.
I didn't really like the second stanza but the last two were just wonderfully put together
Left to a corpse
Without remorse
Her body lifless
Rotting with decay
Parlour of People
Slient, while the
March begins to play
She wrote about fears
page dotted with tears
that this was all she could take
"Now there can simply
be one less heart
left to break"
That was great. |
Toxic Teeth Idiot
 Age: 30 Gender: Female Posts: 645
 | July 12th, 2006 at 05:39pm WOW!
That is all I have to say...... |
B.J Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: - Gender: Male Posts: 8105 | July 12th, 2006 at 05:47pm Ella:YES.
You improved a lot.
I didn't really like the second stanza but the last two were just wonderfully put together
Left to a corpse
Without remorse
Her body lifless
Rotting with decay
Parlour of People
Slient, while the
March begins to play
She wrote about fears
page dotted with tears
that this was all she could take
"Now there can simply
be one less heart
left to break"
That was great.
aww thank you Ella
I never normally write about these things... but I was just sort of struck you know <3 thank you 
thank all of you
I wasnt happy with the second stanza, but I think I'll leave it in anyway |