prostitutes

the offers of the horrendous drugs
the malevolence of the young
the envy of the teens
the animosty in their eyes
sense the hostility
smell it in the air
teach them sex
let them exist in their coke filled glory
let them try and subsist with what was show upon the t.v.
who are they fooling?
you can distinguish how they failed
their lives poorly lived
too bad they didn't see
how much better it all was


ok this is pretty much the first poem I've actually wrote and kind of liked. and I'm actually brave enough to let you fellow GSBians judge it. please don't be too harsh

I don't know, I guess it's pretty mediocre since it doesn't reallly impact the reader.

Work on your flow a bit too.

I know it sucked

I say fuck shoes!:

I know it sucked

Don't put words into my mouth. You obviously have potential.

Ella:

I say fuck shoes!:

I know it sucked

Don't put words into my mouth. You obviously have potential.

yeah I guess that's what matters huh?

I say fuck shoes!:

Ella:

I say fuck shoes!:

I know it sucked

Don't put words into my mouth. You obviously have potential.

yeah I guess that's what matters huh?

Trust me, with time you'll learn to correct yourself and evolve into a great poet. Just don't give up!