tomamazon
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  | July 14th, 2006 at 03:55pm This is venting as well. Charlie. Again. (: Dedicated to Cassie and Charlie.
Patience, my darling, is a virtue she muttered in his hearing ears
Immortal whispers pass out of his unfaithful lips, ready to harm
Was she forgotten in his mind?
Sentimental he may be, but no more melodies will escape his body
Troublesome thoughts run through her swollen head, sleek and sweeping
A game of hard to get is free in their forgotten judgements
Eternal ungratefulness mistakes their motions as a home
Psychological challenges and a quick tug on his heart strings is necessary
Why him, why this unimportant boy?
Torturing her innocent head seems a part of his pathetic life
Childish pursuing is a mistake for a young love, and noted incorrect
Her thoughts entwine with his imaged ones, creating a display of sparks
How deep was this fucking mistake?
Yar, I hope you like. |
Inari
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Posts: 2538 | July 14th, 2006 at 03:57pm Her thoughts intwine with his maged ones, creating a display of sparks
How deep was this fucking mistake?
Loved that.
Poetic ranting has never sounded so good. |
tomamazon
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| July 14th, 2006 at 03:58pm LOL.
thanks! |
Addison Montgomery.
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| July 15th, 2006 at 05:35am We need hugs. |
Bittersweet World
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| July 15th, 2006 at 05:52am O_O You're good.
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newagecarny
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| July 15th, 2006 at 11:19am I loved every single bit of it except
"How deep was this fucking mistake?"
I don't encourage swearing in poetry. |
Whitney.
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Posts: 507 | July 15th, 2006 at 11:31am i thought it wuz gr8, except my brain hasnt started running at 9 in the morning so i didnt understand one word of it.  |
Peter Petrelli
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Posts: 4161 | July 15th, 2006 at 01:26pm Ella:I loved every single bit of it except
"How deep was this fucking mistake?"
I don't encourage swearing in poetry.
My sentiments exactly. You can express anger and emotion without swearing, and it usually has more impact.
But otherwise it was great  |
