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Orgy
Geek
Age: 34
Gender: -
Posts: 179 | July 18th, 2006 at 02:37pm I live life to be noticed
Not to be ignored
If you don't want to talk then say so
Don't just go
I want to talk and for you to listen
I want to tell you all these things
But you ignore me
You say "Whatever"
You ignore me like I'm not even there
Do you even care?
I want to be noticed
I just don't understand why you won't talk to me
I feel so unwanted
For nothing
You don't even talk words against me
If I annoy you so much....then tell me
Don't ignore me |
steady riot.
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 2907 | July 19th, 2006 at 10:10pm It doesn't flow too well, and some of it seems forced. |
Baguelle
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 2727 | July 19th, 2006 at 10:14pm The divine Suicide of Kym:It doesn't flow too well, and some of it seems forced.
I agree. |
newagecarny
Was Here Two Weeks Ago
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 42495
 | July 20th, 2006 at 08:59am The divine Suicide of Kym:It doesn't flow too well, and some of it seems forced. |
SugarGreen
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: -
Gender: Female
Posts: 3369 | July 20th, 2006 at 10:02am I think it is great, but to change the format it is written in may help it. |
Orgy
Geek
Age: 34
Gender: -
Posts: 179 | July 25th, 2006 at 12:15pm ok... |
Love my insanity
Jackass
Age: 93
Gender: Female
Posts: 1591 | July 25th, 2006 at 12:19pm I like it, because it has a good message. it's deep. But I agree, doesn't flow too well. *thumbs up* |
Orgy
Geek
Age: 34
Gender: -
Posts: 179 | July 25th, 2006 at 12:19pm thanx |
ohmygodshutyourbutt
Idiot
Age: -
Gender: Female
Posts: 769
 | July 25th, 2006 at 12:25pm Megatron:The divine Suicide of Kym:It doesn't flow too well, and some of it seems forced.
I agree.
I second this. |
Orgy
Geek
Age: 34
Gender: -
Posts: 179 | July 25th, 2006 at 12:27pm ok...i get it...stop wioth the quotes....i know i write suxy poems...ok....i just need advice...so i can get better |
IxAmxMe
Geek
Age: -
Gender: Female
Posts: 327
| July 25th, 2006 at 05:45pm it's a great poem. try to have constant syllables, and rhymes may help a little. |
Orgy
Geek
Age: 34
Gender: -
Posts: 179 | July 25th, 2006 at 08:00pm thanx....yeah i need to work on that.... |
