The Way Fireflies Burn
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| FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days  Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921  | Longest poem I've ever written. It's kind of a weird narrative poem thing. Also, it's open to your own interpretation, so I'd like to see what you think of it. I left it open-ended as well, so feel free to fill in the last line with what you think would go there. This should be an interesting experiment.  The Way Fireflies Burn I inhaled a hollow thought, which Fell through my lungs and down into my hands Where I tried to write it down, but The pen kept slipping from my fingers. And Without ink, I etched into the desk for all to see, “There was no paper.” I lost myself in a book I’d written, Walking the blank pages for hours at a time. The story would render you speechless: I’d steal every word from your open mouth, Making sure to scratch your throat in the process. Finished, though it still needs an ending. The last line was missing, Along with the few before that. Never one for or to fake accomplishment, There was only one thing left to do. I set the book alight via my surrender And watched the flames lick up my hands. All I’d ever wanted was excitement, For monotony’d lost its charm long ago. Passing the cards just didn’t do it, So I elected to sleep it away. Now I’m practicing the art of waking dream, Yet there’s little on the canvas. I sat on my stool in the middle of the road, Intent on watching the paint dry. Almost noticed the cement swallow my feet, And when I looked down, I was Stuck in a state of panic. It affected the way I breathe after all. The oxygen tanks hissed as I wheezed by, Not taking kindly to the idea of repair. There was nothing to fix them up, anyway. It seemed we’d have to tough it out or think of something. I split my chest open in desperation, While the air fell free into the sky. Free like the fireflies I would try to catch, Only for them to float into stars at the last second. If I neglected them they turned into a thousand light bulbs. The filament burned a hole in my eye, And the after image covered everything in sight. The after image was your face when I… |
| Mikelvr King For A Couple Of Days  Age: - Gender: - Posts: 2356 | Great  ! |
| Inari King For A Couple Of Days  Age: 37 Gender: Female Posts: 2538 | |
| FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921 | Inari:Thank you, darling. Writer's block was actually one of the many inspirations!  And for that, you get a...cupcake! |
| Inari King For A Couple Of Days Age: 37 Gender: Female Posts: 2538 | Hardcore Panda!!1: Woop! Cupcake! *licks screen* |
| Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days  Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161 | |
| FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921 | international_idiot:w00t. Thank you!  Of course you can treasure it. I actually had a few when I was trying to end it, so I read it out loud to decide which one would fit best. But when I got the end of the line I stopped talking because I forgot which one I was testing out, and I then realized that I should just leave it. |
| 11th Street Kid King For A Couple Of Days Age: - Gender: - Posts: 3645 | |
| FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921 | Haha, thank you. |
| 11th Street Kid King For A Couple Of Days Age: - Gender: - Posts: 3645 | Gahhhh. I love your poem so much. xD I thought of a last line... The after image was your face when I… Stepped into your place And decided to isolate you forever Such selfish deeds never existed In this withering flame Until I saw such beauty I know we both know Good intentions won't be the same But dependant upon the Way fireflies burn, shallowness Needs to drift in this verse For a perfect last line. Okay.. I got a bit carried away  It was kinda hard to adapt to your style... mehhh.. I don't think I suceeded but oh well... |
| snowcherry King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 3912 | That was damn amazing, really. Love it. Reminds me of writer's block, like Inari said.  |
| newagecarny Was Here Two Weeks Ago  Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 42495 | |
| Dehren McGhengland Rotting On Here  Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 49206 | All I’d ever wanted was excitement, For monotony’d lost its charm long ago. Passing the cards just didn’t do it, So I elected to sleep it away. Now I’m practicing the art of waking dream, Yet there’s little on the canvas. ^ Favourite stanza Overall, that's one mighty fine poem. Excellent job!  |
| FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921 | WHOAAAA JESUS. @_@ I love you guys so much. You're all amazing. Tomorrow Belongs To Us:Oh my dear lord. That is probably just about the biggest compliment I've ever received, you putting time into something like that. Thank you sooo much. And by the way, I really love it. I think I'm going to save it into my Word file next to the poem. |
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