Angel Billie Joe

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Bat_Country_Chick Idiot Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 842	July 21st, 2006 at 06:51pm Angel Billie Joe My angel has a name His name is Angel Billie Joe Angel Billie Joe watches over me every night with his hazel eyes Some times Angel Billie Joe sees me cry my self to sleep His soft angel wings touch me as I weep Angel Billie Joe is always there when I need someone to talk to Angel Billie Joe knows when I'm hurt and upset Angel Billie Joe watches over me every nigh with his hazel eyes Some times Angel Billie Joe sees me cry my self to sleep His soft angel wings touch me as I weep
Rocking_Bass_Chick Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie Age: - Gender: - Posts: 15	July 21st, 2006 at 07:45pm i love it
DaveyHavok666 Geek Age: - Gender: - Posts: 250	July 21st, 2006 at 07:48pm aww.. that was gorgeous! I loved it! its beautiful!
The Doctor Falling In Love With The Board Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 8786	July 21st, 2006 at 07:51pm Cliché , repeatative and dull. Didn't like it... Keep trying though. Try perhaps using a metaphor or two to liven it up maybe?
St Beth Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie Age: - Gender: - Posts: 50	July 21st, 2006 at 08:06pm I love Billie Joe ´cause when I feel bad and all went wrong His beatiful voice is my cure and I love to know that he´s the best in my life and I only hope that someday He knows how much I love him Billie´s the best Billie`s mine Billie`s a beautiful person I LOVE HIM "So give me a long kiss good night and everything will be alright"
Bat_Country_Chick Idiot Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 842	July 21st, 2006 at 08:14pm I'm glad you like it!!
Rotten Idiot Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 671	July 21st, 2006 at 08:32pm That's a cool idea!
FeeneyKid Jackass Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 1325	July 21st, 2006 at 08:33pm O_o Cool... but kind of creepy. Billie Joe the Peeping Tom... watching you while you sleep. Yeah... creepy. I wonder what else he likes to watch you do. jkjk
Forever Addict Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 14866	July 21st, 2006 at 11:01pm That was...ok I guess. You should make it rhyme or something, then it would be better.
John Entwistle Great Success! Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 55036	July 22nd, 2006 at 12:11am cool
Sylar Falling In Love With The Board Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 5703	July 22nd, 2006 at 06:47am Meh... I'm really iffy on this
newagecarny Was Here Two Weeks Ago Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 42495	July 22nd, 2006 at 06:56am St Beth: Billie`s mine No, he's not.
Emily-Cool Falling In Love With The Board Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 6657	July 22nd, 2006 at 07:01am Nah.. it was under average I think, but I can picture the effect you are trying to create. well tried though...
Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161	July 22nd, 2006 at 07:03am St Beth: I LOVE HIM Psssshhhh. It actually had potential. Some of the images that you used that weren't screaming 'OMFG Billie Joe!!11' were quite sweet and could be worked into something really good. But, really, pssshhh.
Bat_Country_Chick Idiot Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 842	July 22nd, 2006 at 04:43pm international_idiot: St Beth: I LOVE HIM Psssshhhh. It actually had potential. Some of the images that you used that weren't screaming 'OMFG Billie Joe!!11' were quite sweet and could be worked into something really good. But, really, pssshhh. Thanks!! What you said is very true.
Ghostie. Geek Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 495	July 22nd, 2006 at 09:31pm O__O Whoa. That's awsome! You've got a great style. Good job. =]
steady riot. King For A Couple Of Days Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 2907	July 23rd, 2006 at 05:25pm Joan of Arc of Suburbia: Cliché , repeatative and dull. Didn't like it... Keep trying though. Try perhaps using a metaphor or two to liven it up maybe? Yeah, I agree. Try using a metaphor in your next poem. And try to use better wording in some spots.
St Beth Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie Age: - Gender: - Posts: 50	September 4th, 2006 at 08:22pm It´s really nice but u make me cry it´s awesome
Michake Geek Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 295	September 4th, 2006 at 08:52pm it was good but reptitve. i think you say billie joe too much. the idea was great though! keep trying
lyrical_mess Falling In Love With The Board Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 5278	September 5th, 2006 at 06:14am It was good, but not that good. You need better rythym. But you totally have potential. and O_o. This is the first poem I've seen (not including any Inari poems) that has more than one page worth of replies on here.

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