IxAmxMe
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 | July 26th, 2006 at 07:27pm This is to Devin, who I thought I loved. He didn't trust me, because of things he heard from other people.
Well you know what, Devin? You can't always believe everything you hear. That might help.
Sit and watch the coulds float by,
thinkin' 'bout the reasons why,
I ever trusted you.
I hear you sigh,
"Look me in the eye,
and tell me the truth."
I already told you.
I'm sorry but we are through.
If you can't trust me.
I know you want to.
But if it's gonna be this way,
you won't believe me,
"You said you wouldn't leave me."
But what about how I feel?
Or are you worried 'bout the way you'll heal.
"'Cause you broke my heart."
It was broken from the start.
You expect me to be perfect,
you're such a pessimist.
Only expecting the worst.
Like you think your'e so great,
that's exactly what I hate.
You always have to be first.
You only care about you.
I get hurt too.
Just go and leave me alone.
You know you want to. |
k-contentbarrier-
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Posts: 14139 | July 27th, 2006 at 10:45pm it was good. I could see it as more of a song than a poem, but I really liked it a lot. |
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Posts: 546 | July 27th, 2006 at 10:51pm Argh I'm a Pirate:it was good. I could see it as more of a song than a poem, but I really liked it a lot.
Agreed. But it sort of sounds like you tried too hard to rhyme. |
IxAmxMe
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| July 28th, 2006 at 11:24am GAH! PICKLES! I used a online rhyming dictionary type of thing. It helps me out a lot. I wasn't trying hard, though, to rhyme. I just had some help. |
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Posts: 6657 | July 29th, 2006 at 08:36am its not bad, a bit forced, but well done  |
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Posts: 179 | July 29th, 2006 at 09:24am theres an online rhyming thingy?!?....give it to me plz!!!!!!! i like that poem...it was good...*thumbs up* |
IxAmxMe
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| July 29th, 2006 at 10:33am Greenday_luver13:theres an online rhyming thingy?!?....give it to me plz!!!!!!! i like that poem...it was good...*thumbs up*
Thanks. Yeah, it's http://www.rhymezone.com/?loc=bar! |
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Posts: 737 | July 29th, 2006 at 10:36am thats really good i loved it |
IxAmxMe
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| July 29th, 2006 at 10:39am thanks! |
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Posts: 179 | July 29th, 2006 at 10:42am I'm a Rebel, I'm a Saint:Greenday_luver13:theres an online rhyming thingy?!?....give it to me plz!!!!!!! i like that poem...it was good...*thumbs up*
Thanks. Yeah, it's http://www.rhymezone.com/?loc=bar!
THANK YOU!!!!!!! U SAVED MY WRITING CAREER!!!! IF I HAD ONE.....LOL!! |
IxAmxMe
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| July 29th, 2006 at 10:47am Greenday_luver13:I'm a Rebel, I'm a Saint:Greenday_luver13:theres an online rhyming thingy?!?....give it to me plz!!!!!!! i like that poem...it was good...*thumbs up*
Thanks. Yeah, it's http://www.rhymezone.com/?loc=bar!
THANK YOU!!!!!!! U SAVED MY WRITING CAREER!!!! IF I HAD ONE.....LOL!!
LMAO! okay! you're welcome! |
