Orgy
Geek
Age: 34
Gender: -
Posts: 179 | July 29th, 2006 at 05:26pm Ignored
Thrown aside from the rest
Rejected from the one I love most
My heart breaks more each day
As you ignore me
I thought I didn't care about you
I never thought I'd feel this way
This feeling I have
I can't describe it
It hurts and yet......
I can live my life
Theres knots in my stomch
Things I wish I could say
Intwined with rage and love
But I know you'd ignore me
You'd call me a liar
So with these words
Trapped inside my head
I'll live my life without you
Knowing that you hate me
So why should I bother?
Why do I keep apologizing?
Why do I beg for your forgivness?
When I know....that you won't forgive me |
Emily-Cool
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 6657 | July 29th, 2006 at 05:57pm not bad xD |
Love my insanity
Jackass
Age: 93
Gender: Female
Posts: 1591 | July 29th, 2006 at 05:59pm I like it a lot. *claps* If we could rate it like the stories, I'd give you a 10 |
Orgy
Geek
Age: 34
Gender: -
Posts: 179 | July 29th, 2006 at 06:00pm thanx =D |
Retro Suicide
Geek
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 103 | July 30th, 2006 at 12:19am Hmm. It's alright. It doesn't flow really well. And it's pretty short. I think it could be really great if you work on it a little. I like what it's saying though. |
DirntMachine900
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 12 | July 30th, 2006 at 12:22am Not a lot of originality and the flow is mediocre. Next time, think of a click or catch phrase, and build upon that to make a 'masterpiece'
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Orgy
Geek
Age: 34
Gender: -
Posts: 179 | July 31st, 2006 at 09:34am ok...kool....thanx for ur advice....i can tell....that i need it |
