igotsosickofcrying
King For A Couple Of Days
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Posts: 3206 | July 31st, 2006 at 04:45pm I was listening to Placebo's "Swallow" when I wrote it...Its more like a song, it would me cool with long guitar solos...
Razor shines like the Sun
Take it away
It's Sin, it's Love
Why do you want to take it?
It's charm.
Solitude is death,
Dont leave me,
I beg.
Blood is red
Like your lips after we kissed
You're shaking again,
Take my hand,
It's more than destiny,
We're bats, living for the dark,
Meet again?
To find out
Who you really are.
Water is killing mood,
The night comes again,
Fear of the dark?
Never knew you liked
Iron Maiden.
Again
Dark
Love
Miss you. |
newagecarny
Was Here Two Weeks Ago
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 | July 31st, 2006 at 07:47pm I've been listening to a lot of Placebo myself.
I don't see why there aren't any comments, I think you did extremely well considering the thematic you selected.
I liked it a lot, it's original and deep. |
Retro Suicide
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Posts: 103 | July 31st, 2006 at 08:23pm Ella:I've been listening to a lot of Placebo myself.
I don't see why there aren't any comments, I think you did extremely well considering the thematic you selected.
I liked it a lot, it's original and deep.
That's exactly everything I was thinking when i read this.
I think it sounds better spoken as a poem than sung as a song. But that's beside the point, I was just pointing it out. |
°MorbidRose°
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Gender: Female
Posts: 1723
 | July 31st, 2006 at 11:12pm Wow.
I really liked it.
I agree with Retro Suicide, it would sound much better spoken aloud, maybe spoken with a quiet music in the background.
It wouldn't sound as good as a rock song with long guitar solos.
Love it. |
