To Warm Her Bones.

And down the raindrops fall,
To wreck her life,
To lose it all.
To meet raindrops that fell.
From the heavens down to hell.

She walks around the drops,
To keep her dry,
To find what's lost.
To make her life worth while,
After she walks another mile.

She sings a song alone,
To hear her thoughts,
To warm her bones.
To keep her spirit high,
So she forgets to cry.

She meets a boy downtown,
To cheer her up,
To change her frown.
To be the boy she meets,
So life finally feels complete.

I didn't like the last stanza too much, I think you could have ended it a lot better. It's simple but beautiful, and you didn't overuse the repetition either.

I loved this;
"She walks around the drops,
To keep her dry,
To find what's lost.
To make her life worth while"

"She sings a song alone,
To hear her thoughts,
To warm her bones.
To keep her spirit high,
So she forgets to cry. "

perfect.

I liked it alot, sounded like a lyric though!! but it was beautiful

Ella:

I didn't like the last stanza too much, I think you could have ended it a lot better. It's simple but beautiful, and you didn't overuse the repetition either.

I loved this;
"She walks around the drops,
To keep her dry,
To find what's lost.
To make her life worth while"

Ohh thanks. :]
That last stanza was kind of harder than the rest for me though because I wasn't sure how it should end. But thanks. I'll probably end up editing it.

I really liked it. In places, it was a little repetitive and choppy, but those are things which can be improved. Otherwise, it has heaps and heaps of potential to be something really special.