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Orgy
Geek
Age: 34
Gender: -
Posts: 179 | August 3rd, 2006 at 02:33pm There's no point to stop now.
She's over the edge.
With a razor in her hand.
And cuts in her arm
that spells out his name.
All she can do now
is furfill what she was set to do.
Which is to end it now and
just let it bleed. |
The Doctor
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 8786
  | August 3rd, 2006 at 02:36pm Oh.. cliché dude. you should try and write stuff about more... wide topics (says a huge hypocrite)
 but keep it up |
Orgy
Geek
Age: 34
Gender: -
Posts: 179 | August 3rd, 2006 at 02:36pm o...ok...=] |
radioactive
Geek
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 338
| August 4th, 2006 at 12:58am tis good |
Orgy
Geek
Age: 34
Gender: -
Posts: 179 | August 5th, 2006 at 07:19pm thanx = D |
newagecarny
Was Here Two Weeks Ago
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 42495
| August 6th, 2006 at 05:02am CLICHÉ
Cheer up, emo kid. You're fucking 14. Life's wonderful. |
Garrett Hanlund
This Board Is My Home
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 30801
| August 6th, 2006 at 05:07am I think you mean fullfill. And Ella is right, cheer up and write about something you know. |
wake the dead.
This Board Is My Home
Age: 37
Gender: Female
Posts: 30440 | August 6th, 2006 at 05:35am I think when you write about something like cutting, you need to have more depth in your words. This sounds like something someone with no background with self-harm would write.
Poseur ™:I think you mean fullfill. And Ella is right, cheer up and write about something you know.
*fulfill. |
Lissie!
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 7305
| August 6th, 2006 at 10:02am I think all poems get better if you know what you're writing about. |
Whitney.
Idiot
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 507 | August 6th, 2006 at 10:04am Lissie.:I think all poems get better if you know what you're writing about.
agree |
Orgy
Geek
Age: 34
Gender: -
Posts: 179 | August 6th, 2006 at 04:18pm thanx for ur halp =] |
Orgy
Geek
Age: 34
Gender: -
Posts: 179 | August 6th, 2006 at 04:19pm Mysterious_loner:thanx for ur halp =] **help |
Arcane-Inamorata
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 3278
| August 6th, 2006 at 07:24pm not bad... A little short, and "cliche" as most have pointed out.. |
DaveyHavok666
Geek
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 250 | August 10th, 2006 at 12:35am Its very goos, try to make the poems longer though! * Wink, wink* |
