Smiles Among Doubts

Here's a song I wrote about a girl I'm in love with..

Icy waters erupt
I can't hear me anymore
Knots pierce holes in my throat
Bleeding words that i feel for

And I, I feel
Your palm settle right into mine
And now I feel
The beauty to draw our perfect line

Oh, I love it
I think of it
In the best kind of way
Will you save me
If I'm drowning
My love, I am here to stay

Oh, my heart it erupts
My love leaks onto your hands
Every beach that I dream of
Your name's written in the sand

And I have you
Locked inside of my mind
And I want to
Talk to you all day and night

When I fell into your life
You caught me with your open arms
Now am I still worth the time?
Say the words that truly are

does she know you like her?

Hardcore_rock_fan:

does she know you like her?

yes..she does.

That was so cute. I really liked it.

Not just because it was sweet, I thought it was well written as well. And I could hear it to music...which is a good thing seeing as it's a song not a poem.


The only thing is, I thought there was going to be more, but it ended. I don't know if I was just wrapped up in the moment, but it seemed to be missing something. Or well, not missing something, but if you were to add on to it, I don't think it would sound weird to me.


Good job. =]

I loved that. It's beautiful.

I wish someone would write a poem like that for me.

I love it!
And I love your avatar even more.

That girl is lucky to have someone like you write poems about her ^___^