Your just so far away now - GeekStinkBreath.net

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bratbassist Idiot Age: - Gender: - Posts: 510	August 20th, 2006 at 08:16am You're just so far away now I remember the day you left me, I remember the day I died inside, Because you left me. In fitful nights of sleep, You would comfort me, But now your gone. You've been gone for so long now, The things I remember about that day, Are blurred by the sadness I felt, You gave me a single white rose, A kiss on my cheek, Before you plane sored away, Before you became just a memory for me, A sad memory for me that day. I wish I new why you left me, I begged and I pleaded, My eyes were red with the tears, I now know why you left me, You told me you had a girl back home That neaded you, But you know I neaded you too, Thats why you didnt tell mom why you left, Now your just so far away, I want you to know I'll forgive you, When you come home, If you come home, Dad. __________________________________________________________ (none of this is true, my dad is still at home with my mum, I just had an idea for this poem, I know my spelling is pretty rubbish some times, so please dont judge me in that, thanks!)
tomamazon GSBitch Age: 29 Gender: Female Posts: 68084	August 20th, 2006 at 08:21am moz: Your just so far away now I remember the day you left me, I remember the day I died inside, Because you left me. In fitful nights of sleep, You would comfort me, But now your gone. You've been gone for so long now, The things I remember about that day, Are blurred by the sadness I felt, You gave me a single white rose, A kiss on my cheek, Before you plane sored away, Before you became just a memory for me, A sad memory for me that day. I wish I new why you left me, I begged and I pleaded, My eyes were red with the tears, I now know why you left me, You told me you had a girl back home That neaded you, But you know I neaded you too, Thats why you didnt tell mom why you left, Now your just so far away, I want you to know I'll forgive you, When you come home, If you come home, Dad. __________________________________________________________ (none of this is true, my dad is still at home with my mum, I just had an idea for this poem, I know my spelling is pretty rubbish some times, so please dont judge me in that, thanks!) I love it. Except for the grammar in the title. Its You're. Other than that, I love it =D
bratbassist Idiot Age: - Gender: - Posts: 510	August 20th, 2006 at 08:27am yeah, not so good at grammer and stuff, I am when Im not writing poetry, its just my hands are'nt as fast as my mind.

bratbassist
Idiot

Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 510

August 20th, 2006 at 08:16am

You're just so far away now

I remember the day you left me,
I remember the day I died inside,
Because you left me.
In fitful nights of sleep,
You would comfort me,
But now your gone.
You've been gone for so long now,
The things I remember about that day,
Are blurred by the sadness I felt,
You gave me a single white rose,
A kiss on my cheek,
Before you plane sored away,
Before you became just a memory for me,
A sad memory for me that day.

I wish I new why you left me,
I begged and I pleaded,
My eyes were red with the tears,
I now know why you left me,
You told me you had a girl back home
That neaded you,
But you know I neaded you too,
Thats why you didnt tell mom why you left,
Now your just so far away,
I want you to know I'll forgive you,
When you come home,
If you come home, Dad.
__________________________________________________________

(none of this is true, my dad is still at home with my mum, I just had an idea for this poem, I know my spelling is pretty rubbish some times, so please dont judge me in that, thanks!) Smile

tomamazon
GSBitch

Age: 29
Gender: Female
Posts: 68084

August 20th, 2006 at 08:21am

moz:
Your just so far away now

I remember the day you left me,
I remember the day I died inside,
Because you left me.
In fitful nights of sleep,
You would comfort me,
But now your gone.
You've been gone for so long now,
The things I remember about that day,
Are blurred by the sadness I felt,
You gave me a single white rose,
A kiss on my cheek,
Before you plane sored away,
Before you became just a memory for me,
A sad memory for me that day.

I wish I new why you left me,
I begged and I pleaded,
My eyes were red with the tears,
I now know why you left me,
You told me you had a girl back home
That neaded you,
But you know I neaded you too,
Thats why you didnt tell mom why you left,
Now your just so far away,
I want you to know I'll forgive you,
When you come home,
If you come home, Dad.
__________________________________________________________

(none of this is true, my dad is still at home with my mum, I just had an idea for this poem, I know my spelling is pretty rubbish some times, so please dont judge me in that, thanks!)

I love it. Except for the grammar in the title. Its You're.

Other than that, I love it =D

bratbassist
Idiot

Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 510

August 20th, 2006 at 08:27am

yeah, not so good at grammer and stuff, I am when Im not writing poetry, its just my hands are'nt as fast as my mind.