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Inari King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 37 Gender: Female Posts: 2538 | September 1st, 2006 at 06:18am Blankets spread under rainclouds to catch the beauty in their tears.
Take cover because there'll be crash landings of aquatic kinds tonight.
No, I'm not basking in misery. I'm just camping out for the aftermath
when the air is washed of all the venom and it's easier to breathe
when my choking isn't confused as curses for the mistakes I've made.
There's innocence in this oxygen that I'm craving for my heartbeat
because it's stumbling out of rhythm and pining for its salvation.
Who looks out for the low-lives if they don't open their eyes?
I'm begging you not to sleep on the answer to this one, honey,
because life is strapping on its sneakers, ready to pass you by.
But you always looked so beautiful to me when you smiled just like a
rainbow tracing colour into the night sky, lending faith to dreamers.
And I'm only dreaming with my eyes open, illusions so vivid and pure
that they're burning holes in the night sky for hope to shine through.
Shooting stars like Heaven's skimmed pebbles chased their possibilities
over macabre lakes of darkness while I was still chasing my tail in vain.
Weaving circles while I was thinking straight and getting my mind in knots.
I know I'm not making sense but that was always the story of my strife.
There were years of sleep-walking dreams, but tonight I finally woke up. |
Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161 | September 1st, 2006 at 06:38am Awesome.  I especially loved 'Shooting stars like Heaven's skimmed pebbles chased their possibilities
over macabre lakes of darkness while I was still chasing my tail in vain', I thought those lines were gorgeous. |
Inari King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 37 Gender: Female Posts: 2538 | September 1st, 2006 at 08:40am Thank you.  |
electricshavingcream Geek
 Age: 30 Gender: Male Posts: 126 | September 1st, 2006 at 10:00am that is so deep.
i absolutely love it! |
Inari King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 37 Gender: Female Posts: 2538 | September 1st, 2006 at 10:10am 1amtheminority:that is so deep.
i absolutely love it!

Thank you. |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921
| September 1st, 2006 at 12:21pm Uber smushalicious.  |
Decorated <3 Emergancy Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 2 | September 1st, 2006 at 12:37pm Wow! You've got talent, I love it! ^-^ It's very inspering and emotional, I think it's great. |
Rockaway Beach Jackass
 Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 1279 | September 1st, 2006 at 12:54pm I think this might be my favourite poem by you so far.
Loved it. |
Inari King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 37 Gender: Female Posts: 2538 | September 1st, 2006 at 02:20pm Thank you so much guys. |
'KriistenGates' Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 68 | September 1st, 2006 at 02:31pm Its amazing. You're a really good poet =] |
lyrical_mess Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 5278
 | September 2nd, 2006 at 01:22pm *hugs*. My Inari God. This was really beautiful. My comments on your poems aren't really varied because they're all beautiful. There's really nothing else I can say because they just warp everyone into this world where there's nothing but those words, the speaker of those words and the image playing in my head of these two people laying side-by-side in the woods, wrapped around each other.
And one of them just asks, starry-eyed "Do you love me?"
And gets silence in reply, and just that lack of an answer is the answer. And the speaker realizes. |
Inari King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 37 Gender: Female Posts: 2538 | September 2nd, 2006 at 01:51pm lyrical_gaah52:*hugs*. My Inari God. This was really beautiful. My comments on your poems aren't really varied because they're all beautiful. There's really nothing else I can say because they just warp everyone into this world where there's nothing but those words, the speaker of those words and the image playing in my head of these two people laying side-by-side in the woods, wrapped around each other.
And one of them just asks, starry-eyed "Do you love me?"
And gets silence in reply, and just that lack of an answer is the answer. And the speaker realizes.
Wow.
To think you got that from my poem.
That is really incredible.
I'm touched and envious of your beautiful mind at the same time. |
lyrical_mess Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 5278
 | September 2nd, 2006 at 02:13pm Thanksh. But honestly, like...I just read your poem and that's what I read. I dunno, its weird. Hey, um. Where's Kainiala? |
Ex.Of.A.Freak.-TCD Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: 87 Gender: Female Posts: 5844
 | September 2nd, 2006 at 04:50pm Absolutely beautiful.
It touched my heart in a way I didn't think would be possible.
Keep writing. You're an amazing poet. |
Inari King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 37 Gender: Female Posts: 2538 | September 3rd, 2006 at 05:39am TCD [ILoveYou]:It touched my heart in a way I didn't think would be possible.
Wow.
What a compliment. |
Alleged Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 19 | September 3rd, 2006 at 05:42am I've reread it again now after some things have happened and I still stand with what I said in your journal.
But for the right reasons, now.
I think. |
Inari King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 37 Gender: Female Posts: 2538 | September 3rd, 2006 at 05:47am Insincere Introvert:I've reread it again now after some things have happened and I still stand with what I said in your journal.
But for the right reasons, now.
I think.
Wow.
And to think after things have changed, your ideas about it haven't.
That's pretty awesome. |
Alleged Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 19 | September 3rd, 2006 at 05:51am Inari:Insincere Introvert:I've reread it again now after some things have happened and I still stand with what I said in your journal.
But for the right reasons, now.
I think.
Wow.
And to think after things have changed, your ideas about it haven't.
That's pretty awesome.
Eh.
The characteristics of awesome maybe not. We'd have to get a dictionary to compare and contrast. |
Inari King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 37 Gender: Female Posts: 2538 | September 3rd, 2006 at 06:00am Insincere Introvert:Eh.
The characteristics of awesome maybe not. We'd have to get a dictionary to compare and contrast.
Or maybe a thesaurus and find a more appropriate word. |
snowcherry King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 3912 | September 3rd, 2006 at 01:49pm It's beautiful, really. |