The Doctor
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 8786
  | September 4th, 2006 at 06:33pm Meh. Crush, kill destroy.
Obscene,
bottles apon bottles of
clear poison.
Inviting to the eye, dare I?
A plume of purple as I
pour another solution into the
mixture.
I'm having a seizure.
Is this hallicination a
side effect of this potation?
Beams of light hit the beaker
like cold, autumn rain.
I stir and stir and I continue to add.
I wear no googles,
I am cooking my fate in a
standard flask.
Hot, seething acid
that I created,
mulls over the idea of titration,
Any explination to
my chemical behavoir? I boil it
over a vivid, green flame.
It's a novice,
it jumps excitedly like a small
child into puddles, the droplets
burn my skin with a hiss.
The liquid glows like
a million crammed fireflies,
it lets out a
squeal of exhustion. It stops
shaking like a dog at the vet,
that vet, always standing with
a syringe of euthanasia.
A power that used to be
asks what I am doing.
Reason?
What is reason?
There is only rhyme.
Hypocrite!
He wears a noose of woven
silk around his neck.
I pocket the solution,
my solution to a life that
meant nothing except
slight annoyance to
all those
around
her. |
Don Quixote
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 3 | September 5th, 2006 at 09:43am Oy you  Much much better.Brilliant,tho hard,I think...  |
radioactive
Geek
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 338
| September 5th, 2006 at 10:18am that was cool lol |
Peter Petrelli
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 4161 | September 5th, 2006 at 02:04pm Oooooh. Different, and dark. Love it. |
Inari
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 37
Gender: Female
Posts: 2538 | September 5th, 2006 at 02:08pm Awesome.
Dark but I loved it. |
lyrical_mess
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 5278
| September 5th, 2006 at 02:44pm Very dark themed, but excellent. *marries your imagery*. |
newagecarny
Was Here Two Weeks Ago
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 42495
| September 5th, 2006 at 04:32pm Excellent 
The best I read in a while.
I love how its choppiness even improved the feel. And I'm especially pleased how you managed to do it with simple words yet make it so striking.
I'm looking forward to reading more. You have that something, kid. 
Just use spell check next time, okay?
Kudos for the Amélie avatar too. |
