lyrical_mess
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 5278
  | September 27th, 2006 at 11:50am This just a giant rambling session I had to get off my chest. I only really like the first and last stanzas.
For The Imaginary Animal
Kill me before I count to ten
I didn't think I'd ever
Want to see you again
We had our two days
We said it was done
But it seems my confusion
Has just begun
I'll admit that it hurt
When finally, you turned me away
But I thought that was just
What I wanted you to say
Finally, I was free
From your attention.
Now sometimes you see me as evil
With no chance of redemption
I don't think I can forget
What I've known all along
After days and months
I wanted it to be true
And maybe I've told you
Opaque and again
You and I
We're exactly the same
A couple of oddballs
Bouncing around this game
Following our hearts
Filled with nothing but dreams
Soon you'll realize
Soon you will see
That I'm everything you want
Times three.
Yeah...the only parts I like are the first and last ones. But it's something I need to say. To an imaginary animal and you have no idea what I'm on about. But that's okay. I just need to know what you think. |
lyrical_mess
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 5278
| September 27th, 2006 at 03:37pm My poem feels ignored. *bump*. Sorry. I just really like opinions.
*is an opinion whore* |
lyrical_mess
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 5278
| October 2nd, 2006 at 09:22am All I wanted were a few comments...geez. I just want to know if it's good. |
Inari
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 37
Gender: Female
Posts: 2538 | October 2nd, 2006 at 10:52am It has potential, honey.
I liked the first and last stanzas. |
lyrical_mess
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 5278
| October 2nd, 2006 at 02:03pm Thanks. I just needed someone to read my weird, poetic rant.  |
