Antithesis
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 45 | October 13th, 2006 at 06:28am err..hey guys..this is the poem i wrote after not writing for a loong time so..plz gimem some comments for me to improve..thnx..
I am your memory,
distorted reality,
tampled with,
lurking,
within your conscience,
beneath
your consciousness,
an ambush,
waiting,
patiently,
chancing upon
an attack.
i am your thoughts,
haunting,
questioning,
the deepest,
darkest
secrets
of your mind,
the explicit
details
of the disillusions
forced upon
you. |
Antithesis
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 45 | October 13th, 2006 at 08:49am can somebody plz comment?? |
The Rev
Addict
Age: 38
Gender: Male
Posts: 14004 | October 13th, 2006 at 10:02am It's alright.
but nothing Special. |
Fillup
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 86
 | October 13th, 2006 at 10:04am it's cool |
