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losers_are_cool
King For A Couple Of Days
losers_are_cool
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 4120
October 27th, 2006 at 09:35am
Okay. I've have writers block for ages...and still do. But this is the first thing in forever I've even gotten close to finishing. I'm not totally sure it is, but that's okay.

I'm hoping you don't think it's that bad. Laughing I need to get used to posting here again...


We could stand here and admire
The flawless construction of
Your heart's sure demise
But I don't think I could stand
The pain in your crystal clear eyes

Some may call it impossible
To be so concerned about someone
You've never called your own
But I know that one day soon
We'll be closer than you could imagine

Picture perfect and unafraid
With hands interlocked, we'll dance
Dance through the catacombs of
Your unexcavated heart
And we'll penetrate deeper than you could dream

No one ever said we could take this
No one ever said we should try
But no one ever said you couldn't be mine
So as long as I can see you; feel you
I'll try to keep your heart sane

We could stand here and admire
The flawless construction of
Your heart's sure demise
But I don't think I could stand
The pain in your lonely eyes.
Peter Petrelli
King For A Couple Of Days
Peter Petrelli
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 4161
October 27th, 2006 at 10:08am
I especially loved the first and third stanzas. Beautiful. Very Happy
losers_are_cool
King For A Couple Of Days
losers_are_cool
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 4120
October 27th, 2006 at 08:04pm
Thank you. Very Happy You have no idea how much that means coming from you. I just adore your poetry.
losers_are_cool
King For A Couple Of Days
losers_are_cool
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 4120
October 28th, 2006 at 05:07pm
...No one else? Please, I'd really appreciate your feedback,
losers_are_cool
King For A Couple Of Days
losers_are_cool
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 4120
October 30th, 2006 at 01:02am
No one? Alright...
Peter Petrelli
King For A Couple Of Days
Peter Petrelli
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 4161
October 30th, 2006 at 10:51am
losers_are_cool:
Thank you. Very Happy You have no idea how much that means coming from you. I just adore your poetry.


Embarassed
I-Loved-You
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
I-Loved-You
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 5
October 30th, 2006 at 11:02am
that was amazing. i would kill to be able to write half as good as that
losers_are_cool
King For A Couple Of Days
losers_are_cool
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 4120
October 31st, 2006 at 09:15pm
Oh wow. Thank you. Very Happy
Joshontheguitar
Geek
Joshontheguitar
Age: 32
Gender: Male
Posts: 222
November 4th, 2007 at 02:06am
Gwen, you're still an amazing poet =)

My favorite is the third stanza
newagecarny
Was Here Two Weeks Ago
newagecarny
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 42495

Mibba
November 4th, 2007 at 07:05pm
Gwen, I've missed your work tehe
C.j. Hardcore Pansy
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
C.j. Hardcore Pansy
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 97

Mibba
November 4th, 2007 at 10:24pm
aaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhh i loved it!!!!! you're an amaziing inspiration to me! :]] *i never comment but i read* i loved it!
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