Go On, Shoot Me

Alright, hopefully this thread is justified, if not, well it's no use me saying 'delete it' because the mods will anyway.
ON WITH THE POST:
Those of you who I've pm'd will know that after about 6 months of writers block, work, hangovers and fights- I've actually finished the story off.
I've tied up all the loose ends I can think of, everything's sorted out and blah blah blah.
I'm thinking of doing a one shot sequel later on and basically I want this thread to be for you guys to tell me where I went wrong in the story, how I could improve my writing etc. It's also for you all to tell me what a brilliant writer I am (compliments to me are always gratefully accepted )
So thank you in advance to those of you who read and rate it (and again thanks to you all who've already rated it).

Hi... How about a link and some info ON the story

http://www.geekstinkbreath.net/fan/story/1797/0/

It's a pretty angsty story, Billie kills Adie, Mike's not helping by aggravating Billie, Tre's stuck in the middle plus Joey and Jakob are torn between their dad and their mother's memory.

sounds interesting

Thanks

It's brilliant, deffinately one of my favourite stories on GSB, the first part had me hooked within the first sentence!

It's different to the other stories I've read on GSB that are predictable.

I hope you do end up writing a sequel it would be awesome.

Thank you! -grins like a fool-