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The Doctor Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 8786
 | November 1st, 2006 at 12:45pm Bad days happen after bad nights, no? Don't ask, don't tell
The weakening twitch
in my hands show that
I am not the fidgeter
I was before.
Not a child
but a walking strip
of wallpaper.
Must I bleed to gain
your attention?
My lungs cough out
a putrid yellow
phlegm, I'm drowning.
I feel the salty water
searing at the back of my throat.
I'm drowning.
"You're just a whore,
I can't communicate."
I've been pushed into a deep fishbowl,
the water rising like thick
glycerol, I can't breathe this
thick air. I can't breathe this
water.
Yet I can see so clearly,
your laughing faces,
distorted by the bowl,
like monsters in a haunted house.
"Look at the pathetic girl!
She wants attention, let the
stupid mortal die!"
The laughter;
I hear the laughter at night.
It has a face. A stiff man
with no eyes, no nasal
cartilage, daddy, daddy, daddy.
The moon watches me
suffocate every night,
through the thin
controversial veil of my
curtains. Why should it care?
He's seen this so many times before.
The moon is bored of death.
Those around me, watch the
thick smoke,
chug; chug; chug;
he brings me sleep
in that obnoxious gas.
My friends, where are they now?
They have grown up. Matured.
They laugh with the others.
Except one, my angel.
Yet they want to block her out
of my sight!
They say I should kill my will,
"You'll get nowhere like that!"
They say I should kill her.
I'm going nowhere.
I'm walking along a tightrope.
Below me swirls a sea of madness,
death. I have dipped my toes
in it before.
Not again, not again.
Yet I will, they keep pushing me.
"Exams! More important than your feelings dear!"
That prods, those horrible, horrible prods.
I fall.
Forever falling,
why can't I ever land
and break my crazy neck? |
rage;love;clark Geek
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 494 | November 1st, 2006 at 01:05pm i never, EVER respond to other's poems on GSB
i only whore my own
but this has got to be the most amazing poem I've ever read on here
wow bravo |
Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161 | November 1st, 2006 at 02:45pm
*collapses and dies* |
The Doctor Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 8786
 | November 1st, 2006 at 03:22pm Ginger Nuts:
*collapses and dies* ...*wonders if that is a good comment or not* |
Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161 | November 1st, 2006 at 03:27pm It's an uber awesome comment, because I'm speechless. I'm al s o uanlbe ot fomr c omle pte woord s tooooooo oo o, because I'm that awe inspired.
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The Doctor Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 8786
 | November 1st, 2006 at 03:30pm Ginger Nuts:It's an uber awesome comment, because I'm speechless. I'm al s o uanlbe ot fomr c omle pte woord s tooooooo oo o, because I'm that awe inspired.
 ahh |
tomamazon GSBitch
 Age: 29 Gender: Female Posts: 68084
 | November 1st, 2006 at 03:31pm o____________________________________________o
i fucking adore you. |
The Doctor Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 8786
 | November 1st, 2006 at 04:18pm She Wants To Be GSB:o____________________________________________o
i fucking adore you.
Thanks! |
robotchicken. Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 8423
| November 1st, 2006 at 11:46pm I felt it. Your poem was easy for me to get lost in, and that is something very hard to do. I liked it and I invisioned it very well :] |
adrea Jackass
 Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 1323
 | November 2nd, 2006 at 01:58am That was so awesome! Good work! |
Milk King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 3741
 | November 2nd, 2006 at 03:43am A-fricken-mazing |
beans Geek
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 222 | November 3rd, 2006 at 11:03am yea its good lol you used a hell of alot of words i didnt understand but hey it's brilliant!!!  |
beans Geek
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 222 | November 3rd, 2006 at 11:04am ehem what is the poem about overall? Is it personal |
The Doctor Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 8786
 | November 3rd, 2006 at 11:34am beans:ehem what is the poem about overall? Is it personal Highly. |
Insurgentes Post Whore
 Age: 37 Gender: Female Posts: 23688
| November 3rd, 2006 at 11:37am 
Could you possibly be any better? |
The Doctor Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 8786
 | November 3rd, 2006 at 11:41am Serena.:
Could you possibly be any better? Yeash. I got a loooong way to go until I achieve my goal.  |
What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451
| November 3rd, 2006 at 12:18pm What’s with the title in Latin? “In the name of the lord of hosts and his son get thee to the lower world”.
Anyway…It’s very creative and original. Personally I thought it to be blunt at some places but that is of no importance since the poem is so strong. I love the structure and how you could make it flow so well. Great imagery as well. Just brilliant all and all together  |
The Doctor Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 8786
 | November 3rd, 2006 at 12:22pm What's in a name?:What’s with the title in Latin? “In the name of the lord of hosts and his son get thee to the lower world”.
Anyway…It’s very creative and original. Personally I thought it to be blunt at some places but that is of no importance since the poem is so strong. I love the structure and how you could make it flow so well. Great imagery as well. Just brilliant all and all together  It's a quote from teh play I'm reading 'The Crucible', the Rev Hale says that to exorcise Betty. It sparks off a whole witchhunt and it causes the irrelevent deaths of 20 people and anarchy. Gotta love Salem.  Anyway...I wanted that as the title as I thought of myself unworthy, in the grand scheme of things to have the homour of living in such a good way...
Thanks, I don't think it as orginal...cause it seems to echo a lotta ideas from my poetic idol (seriously o_o) Plath, like a fishbowl instead of a Bell Jar. Y'know? It was meant to be blunt in places because in the mood I was in when I wrote it. I didn't want emotions, I wanted my life in pure black and white. ...Yeah... |
What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451
| November 3rd, 2006 at 12:30pm Aha, I see. Ok then
Well, maybe not but I can only compare you to other armatures (namely people on here or who has been here). I realize that it was intentional but it’s only my personal preference, I like it best when poems aren’t just black and white.
P.S armature isn’t meant as an insult  D.S. |
The Doctor Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 8786
 | November 3rd, 2006 at 12:32pm What's in a name?:Aha, I see. Ok then
Well, maybe not but I can only compare you to other armatures (namely people on here or who has been here). I realize that it was intentional but it’s only my personal preference, I like it best when poems aren’t just black and white.
P.S armature isn’t meant as an insult  D.S. Well thak you anyway. It was well recieved, surely. |