votefordisco
Rotting On Here
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 45710
 | November 1st, 2006 at 04:15pm I'm not too good at writing full poems but I've written quite a few 'mini poems' as I like to call them.
I don't know if I've posted any of these before but I don't think I have.
Comments would be lovely if you can think of anything to say, good or bad.
Thank you. x
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He's a deep thinker
Dreaming in his own world
I'm a deep dreamer
Thinking only of you
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Watching as she digs a trench in the flesh of her hand
It's the colour of blood but no vein is to be found
Perhaps it's the red in her eyes
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I want to leave my stomache in the air
Killing my appetite with spead
I want to lose my soul in the time it takes
To throw my body to it's grave
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It's not because he's self obsessed
It's because he's insecure
It's not because he wants to look good
It's because he's afraid of looking bad
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You should fall in love with me
Then I could only smile
We should be together forever
If only for a while
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P.s. Sorry for any spelling mistakes and whatnot...x |
votefordisco
Rotting On Here
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| November 2nd, 2006 at 11:22am Are they really that bad? |
The Doctor
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 35
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 | November 2nd, 2006 at 11:27am I think that maybe if you rearranged the poems then you could have one b ig poem. They are pretty damn good. Besides the little spelling mistakes. |
votefordisco
Rotting On Here
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Gender: Female
Posts: 45710
| November 2nd, 2006 at 12:02pm Martha Corey.:I think that maybe if you rearranged the poems then you could have one b ig poem. They are pretty damn good. Besides the little spelling mistakes. Hmmm, maybe. I could try it I guess. And thanks. :] |
SugarGreen
King For A Couple Of Days
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Gender: Female
Posts: 3369 | November 2nd, 2006 at 12:11pm I like this one.
"You should fall in love with me
Then I could only smile
We should be together forever
If only for a while " |
votefordisco
Rotting On Here
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 45710
| November 2nd, 2006 at 12:12pm Jaguire13:I like this one.
"You should fall in love with me
Then I could only smile
We should be together forever
If only for a while " That's my most recent one. I wrote it whilst doing my Ethics homework the other day. Lolz.
Thanks. :] |
beans
Geek
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Posts: 222 | November 2nd, 2006 at 02:30pm they're all fab i dont give a toss about selling mistakes the people that point em out i think are just being picky...our poems are really good |
votefordisco
Rotting On Here
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 45710
| November 3rd, 2006 at 11:59am beans:they're all fab i dont give a toss about selling mistakes the people that point em out i think are just being picky...our poems are really good Thank you! |
